Fill up my bottle with what I love most
strawberry jam, and some Marmite on toast
Kippers and custard, and lovely French cheese
hot English mustard, and Darjeeling teas
Some real Irish coffee, now that is a dream
an extra large tub, of Hagen Das cream
An Orange an Apple some wild Strawberries
a nice ripe Banana, some shiny black Cherries
And if by some chance there’s a corner to spare
a plasma T.V and a Ottoman Chair
CD's by Diamond, and Elvis the King
Barry White love songs. Sinatra, and Bing
Poems by Wadsworth, Longfellow, and Frost
a painting by Van Gogh, and bugger the cost
A copy of Shakespeare for something to read
and a shot of Jack Daniels, should cover my need
Now cork it up quickly and send it to me
address it to “Legend, somewhere at sea”
Author notes
Written June 7th, 2005
In a list
- Allpoetry Book Project: One • next in list
- Humour • next in list
- brilliant poetry by my friends • next in list
- My top favorites, from my favorites • next in list
A contest entry
- Ok here is a contest for you. I want you to write me a poem about what you would put in a bottle if by flipflopinTM.
300 points, ended June 7, 2005, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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I like all the things you would put in your bottle and I think they would all be just dandy. I would have it all, and I would add one more thing, and that would be my pet cause I couldn't go anywhere without them. Awonderful flowing piece that really swept on down the page with awesome stuff that now has made me so hungry I just have to get up get some of your mostest favourite stuff.....(I won't tell you what it is cause you might get jealous). lol!!!!!Anyway, This piece was just sensational and really rocked along like you were enjoying yourself at the time of writing and it just flew out of you.I see I have commented on this before but what the heck, it was worth the second read.
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ahhh...the simple life...back to the bare basics. How will you survive? hehe...Brilliant. As always, tight strong and a damn good read
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What can I say? It's all been said. Bravo and can I join you wherever your bottle finds you. Bravo indeed
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This is fantastic. It's been a long time since a poem has made me smile. I just love the imagery and everything about this.
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Wow, this is great!
Really creative, I enjoyed it.
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LOL almost made me want to be shipwrecked! I love the smell, texture and taste of this, it flows easily off the tongue and certainly has all the right ingredients for a great holiday at least!
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Awesome! I love it! I read it to my husband. Very great write!!
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All my favourite things in one place except for the Jack Daniels, could I exchange that for Glenfidditch? Wonderful poem by a very creative poet. I take my hat off to you.
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If I find a case or tso of the wouls you share with a mate
I might have see this seting down at the store. There was a sign that said cheaper if you buy , by the caase. Four cases I"ll make a special deal.Buy one get one- buy two get 2 free..mac -
Very good!
I'm glad I spotted this poem, it was very interesting.
Your rhyme was perfect and not to forced, I thought you did well with the flow and I loved each line. I built up pictures of objects just being put into this bottle, you seem to have a very stretched imgaination which makes the poem a whole lot better. A very uplifting poem! I think your name Legend really is suited for you
This poem was excellent! Great work.
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I like this very much, but I can't put my finger on the exact point that it draws me in...I think perhaps it's the overall structure of the piece. I like rhyme when it is done well, and you've done a marvelous job here.
The flow is great and unforced, and it contains just the right amount of humor to make one grin and say "yup...I'd want that too"
Nice job, and congrats on the spotlight!
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That's very good I'm glad I stopped by for a read. I liked the Jack Daniels bit best.
Happy trails.
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WOW
Rich in rhyme, Rich in rhythm.I truly just love how you put pen to pad and go get 'em..you are the best my friend, clearly living up to your name LEGEND, best believe it's the truth and all would agree with me(well at least on you I place my bet) that is what I'm hedging! EXCEPTIONAL GEM my friend..A TOP FAV!
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Thank you my dear friend, such words will raise a little colour to my cheeks
While this one was a joy to write for the contest I can not say it is one i rate too highly,but then i am rarely happy with what i write, its that ,that spurs me on to be better
Thank you
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Awesome Write dad form start to finish you always have a way with with words and how you do these contest writes is awesome just give you a topic and a way you go.
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Hi James where have you been keeping yourself? Thank you for your comment How Kevin came upon this one to Spotlight i have no idea But I am grateful to him for doing so
Take care and i look forward to reading you when you get down to doing it
Take care
Dad
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oh my gosh! what are we going to do with you lol. I am actualy sitting here with my best friend and reading all of these. We are both enjoying every minute of it. your work is so good its a addictive by the way my friend on here is MoonStarRaven
huggles
Lena -
This is a really cute, fun piece. It's always nice to come across an old gem, and I enjoyed this one
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Wonderful flow to this, although it could be a little more consistent with the commas. A vivid cornucopia of bottled luxuries.
Paul
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excellent!
quite original and fresh. unlike anything I have read lately. I enjoyed your writing for many reasons. It really had a whimsical feel to it. quite clever and interesting. thanks for sharing. I wouldn't change a thing! ...
-Kendal
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It's hard to believe that this excellent piece of poetry didn't receive any simulated hardware in above contest. This is a wonderful poem, and it was joy to read. Great stuff.
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Sir you have a bottle full
Is ther a place to order a couple cases of your life in a bottle No change neressary. We can swap what there is a short supply of...mac
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Adding this to my list of favorites..
You are brilliant ....I love this...made my day
Lynda
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Sounds about right to me Legend. Couldn't you fit the biccy's in...Excellent write again my dear friend...mal
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Methinks thou'lt need a mighty cork to keep all that afloat! Excellent provision for a relaxing getaway!
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this is great. although the background hurts my decaying eyes. could use a darker tone of blue
you made me hungry haha.
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Really good stuff!
Joe
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Oh, you made me feel really hungry in the beginning that I had to stop and grab a snack. lol!!!!!!!! Wonderfully written and very very funny. I think all those things would just about set a soul right, don't you.
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hay that was a great list
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Maybe I should do this for my "friend over seas!" I bet he would love to have a shot of Jack Daniels and some ice cream! Yet another knotch on the branch for poems by Legend that I love!
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It's official, this is definitely one of my favourites! Now if only Tom Hanks from Castaway had thought to do this he would have been sorted!
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Thank you Linda,it is nice to see the old one getting a breath of fresh air It seem a life time ago since i wrote this one.
It is strange but sometimes when i read some of my old stuff I thing did i really write this.each new piece pushes the old work further back.I do enjoy them being brought out Thank you fro that and for commenting. -
this is a wonderful piece ,just brought back memories,of a bottle that was returned to me..this is some type of poetry..love it from beginning to end..thank you so much for sharing..Linda
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My thanks to you Merrigan, I had forgotten this piece, so it was a pleasure to have it revived with your comments thank you so much for reading.I'll have to see what I can do about the TV
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OOOOOOOOOOOH, I love it. I would just have to go on a hunt for a bigger bottle. This is verwy well written, and I really did laugh quite a lot. I do think that I would like the TV myself, but wouldn't know what to do with it, or where to put it....anyways, well written, I LOVE it!
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Say Von do not apologize I love it Maybe we could start a double act, and take it on the road.Though who will be that straight guy i have no idea Looks like we have two comics .Thank you so much for you very entertaining comments .they are even better than the poems Great job
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I addressed as you asked but the weather was foggy,
The kippers went off and your toast, it got soggy
Your hot English mustard melted the cheese
The water was too deep, it covered me knees.
Van Gogh looks a treat on my bedroom wall
Cd's by Diamond, I had no luck at all,
The ice cream, the cherries, the rest of the fruit
I'll store them all here with the rest of the loot!
I waited and waited for a word from you
Cos' if this one had reached you I'd send No. 2
Not a word, not a hint from you did I get
So I'm keeping the chair and your big TV set.
Sorry Legend - I just can't help myself.
Von -
Hey what the heck, Win some, loose some.It all brings Friday around, Thank you
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just another of the many contests where I happen to disagree with judge. Oh well...
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but hey, where'd you leave the map??
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This had to be a winner, it certainly is with me. Great imaginative, artful, humorous writing, you are surely a natural poet. Sings like a song!
Diane
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i really like it well good luck in my contest and thank you for entering
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Hmm, interesting...
Very truthful, because honetly... as if any of us could come up with enough love for the whole world and fit it inside a bottle, eh? serious, but had just enough humor to be amzing!
great job, and good luck in the contest!
~Chentele.
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