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Squall's Heart

He calls for no one's help, advice
His heart is ice
No harm will come
To this strong one

His lips, they speak of no one's lies
Look to his eyes
They dart away
For risk of stay

But only one will melt his soul
Though wars of woe
And battles start
She holds his heart

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Written on 7th June 2005 at 00:41 GMT

Final Fantasy VIII, Squall's love for Rinoa.
Written June 6th, 2005

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  • Second Dance Reborn
    January 9, 2007

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    I really like what you put up here. I played Final Fantasy VIII and everything you said is true about him. I think that this poem flows really well, but sometimes it seems to be forced, but only just. the background is a problem, but everyone is supposed to grade you on the poem, not the stuff in the back. Anyway, good luck in the contest!


  • Tarja
    May 20, 2006
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    This is very sweet. I love the relationship between those two. What he's says to her always melted my heart, "No matter what happens, even if you become the world's enemy, I'll be your knight." Ah!! Turns me into a little girl thinking of those words! And this is a very lovely ode to him! Beautiful job!
    amanda

  • JM Kenyon silver member
    September 15, 2005
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    A beautiful poem and I love the background you've used. Good job. Best wishes and S... ~genielassie~

  • buttrazor
    June 17, 2005
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    i`m a big fan of final fantasy serial and you just made my day, thank you for this wonderful poem, it`s a pleasure to read something of this thematic, wonderful write


  • Shakari
    June 11, 2005
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    Great job! Oh, the backround goes so well with it! Well, I think in the last stanza, you meant through...but it makes sense either way! Great job again! I love reading your poetry, for it shows the thoughts that have made it so pure, true, and strong!


  • RuthKephart
    June 9, 2005
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    I haven't a clue about this game, but regardless, this poem is well written and easy to understand
    Ruth


  • Your Hine Us
    June 9, 2005
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    WOW. . .

  • PhantasyStar
    June 9, 2005
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    Im so happy to see someone mention one of the greatest games of all time. Its gratifying to see this taken not as lightly as other gamers would do. Great job!


  • Merciless Beauty
    June 8, 2005
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    I shall hop right to it

    ~*Meri ♣


  • DefinitiveFreak silver member
    June 8, 2005
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    A dish, he IS! If he was a human, I'd be after him in a FLASH. But then I'd have to smack myself because I'm with someone. He does look like someone I know tho... If you check out my list called Nathan, you will see a picture of Squall's human counterpart.

  • Merciless Beauty
    June 8, 2005
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    Aww! This is so sweet! I love the game too

    Hehe, I also have a crush on him. He's a dish, haha.

    Anyway, I love this..it's beautiful..

    ~*Meri ♣


  • tragicallyGifted
    June 7, 2005
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    wow..i am infatuated with Squall! damn..i have a crush on a game character..oy. but anyway, back to the poem. i like it. i don't exactly know WHY..but i do. great write.
    -Jennifer

  • Silhouetted Angel
    June 6, 2005
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    Ugh Duckie! That is so beautiful. I... I.. I am running out of good words to say. So its beautiful, good luck. And I'll have to come up with a list of words

    ~Angel

  • Tangles
    June 6, 2005
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    i liked it...i'm not a big final fantasy fan but yah..i liked it..good job

    babybug

  • DefinitiveFreak silver member
    June 6, 2005
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    Hey... I've just spent the last hour and a half trying to find the HTML code to highlight text. I'm a gold member and can use HTML. If I had Internet Explorer 6, I would be able to use Rich Text. But of course, being a Mac user, I can't get any higher than IE v5.2.3 which sucks. So, here I am, going to try to use the HTML... wish me luck....


  • countrybabe gold member
    June 6, 2005
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    This is a good poem but the background seems a little too busy for it. I mean you can't read the poem without highlighting it first. You might want to think about changing the colour of your writing or the background so the reader can see it a little better. just letting you know is all. I liked the poem though it was well done.

    Good luck in the contest it is entered in.

    Countrybabe


  • Selana
    June 6, 2005
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    Wow, this is nice. Very sweet poem. I really like it. Best of luck in the contest!
    ~Selana


  • 1-Winged-Angel
    June 6, 2005
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    Wow nice one . I actually have a poem based on squall. This i think resembles squall really well. Excellent job . Good luck in the contest and thanks for entering

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