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Stand

I can't go any lower.
The world always puts me down.
I want someone to lift me up.
Will you help me?

The world always puts me down.
I suffer one blow after another.
Will you help me?
I wish you were here.

I suffer one blow after another.
I try to stand time and time again.
I wish you were here.
Would you help me to stand?

I can't go any lower.
I try to stand time and time again.
I want someone to lift me up.
Would you help me stand.

Author notes

This is a form called a pantoum.  I have a few of these from school.
Written April 22nd, 2005

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  • Enira
    October 13, 2005
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    Hmm...I've never heard of a pantoum poem before. Interesting. ^_^
    This poem was very nicely written, and I must admit I've had these same feelings before. I'm very grateful to have support from wonderful people like you, Andi. You and others help me to stand. I will always be there as your sister to help you stand.
    Keep writing.
    Love from your sis,
    ~Grace