You started out as an untold dream
There but always so unreachable
Just as the stars can sometimes seem
Can't learn because love is not teachable
I tried to hide my true faithful feelings
Wanted to ignore and forget my heart
I wanted nothing with all these dealings
But no longer can I wait, love must start
You knew I always loved and cared
I just was always so indecisive
Only if the pain I caused was spared
for what we had I was inappreciative
I am happy that things are good once again
It is all because we are more then friends
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This is a sonnet that I wrote for school. At the time I had meaning for this but now I say this sonnet could burn for all I care.
Written June 6th, 2005
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Oh wow I really liked it it was simply and clean, and read together well. Great Job with this one!
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this was pretty.
i hoe you got an A in your class.
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There but always so unreachable
Just as the stars can sometimes seem
you have really mastered this form so beautifully...im just in awe of this piece...
really really really well written!
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You do a nice job of using words that are not all that common and rhyming them very masterfully. However, even from your description, your meter is slightly off. You do not use iambic pentameter throughout the piece. I'm not sure it would be that difficult to add a few things to make it work, but even without that, it is a good piece of writing.
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I wrote this in english 9. In order for us to read "Romeo & Juliet" our teacher Mrs. Livingstone wanted us to understand how sonnets worked and looked. Exactly 14 lines. The first twelve lines describe a problem, introduce an issue, or pose a question. The last 2 lines resolve the problem, draw conclusions, or answer the question. Rhythm is Iambic Pentameter. 5 beats, 10 syllables. Unstressed, stressed. Quatrain 4lines. Couplet 2 lines. Thats what I learned about sonnets.
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Aww i love sonnets, William S. perfected them, but you did him justice, just a wonderufl piece. I am glad to hear you are more than just friends. I was wondering the same thing as BurnThePriest, was this a required writing for a class or do you just like the style? Either way i thought it was brilliant and had a great flow to it. Terrific job! Never let that pen (pr keyboard) stop writing (or clikcing) Good luck in the future and not just in writing, Love always and forever Jen
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Its not about Phil. wrote it february sometime after valentines day. Me and phil werent together until april 14
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Hm..english or creatie writting?I had to write 2sonnets in creative writting ,this kicked the shit outta lal of my sonnets though , is it about Phil?It sounds liek it is , hope you 2are hapy together!Loved the sonnet!Talk to oyu later. -Brad
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"You started out as an untold dream
There but always so unreachable"
I loved your poem especially those lines. thx for sharing.
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