This is so very hard
Looking at their faces
Streaked by tears
Etched in a pain so very deep
That the soul fears to drown.
Those things that once gave joy,
Cast aside,
Ignored and discarded
Now reemerge as cherished memories.
Each minute memory of perceived slight
Even the faintest taint
Brings waves of guilt
Adds to the pain.
This well of sorrow seems
A bottomless pit
So very dark
So very deep
No hope of light.
How can I tell them?
“Listen to the quiet whisper
that speaks from your heart.
I am there.
Smell the sweetness that lingers
in my hair as I lay here.
I am there.
Touch the softness of my cheek
as the silence grows.
I am there.
Taste the salt tears
as you look at what is left of me.
I am there.
Can you believe that
one so loved as me
would ever leave you?
Know that I am there.
I am shaking off
the dust from this world
and will soon soar above
this vale of sorrow.
I am going home
to wait there for you.
But first
Pause to say goodbye
With a breath-borne kiss.”
And so I stretch my dusty wings
and I fly.
Author notes
Saddest Things
Written June 6th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Tons of Options... but it's from me, so it'll be different!!! by Corinthians13-4.
456 points, ended January 2, 2007, 14 entries
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Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Breast Cancer Awareness (contest) by astralshepherd.
800 points, ended October 23, 2007, 28 entries
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Wow I think this is beautiful to the max stretch my dusty wings I think that is a beautiful statment. The punctuation of it all was faabulous and I can just feel the last moment great write
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option #6
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I t is so very hard to assess poems which have so much emotional pull to them, they draw the soul into the reading of it, never really letting go…it is much like when we try to let go of someone close, so very close. Your poem is what I like to call a ‘soul psalm’ – where the mind, intellect and emotion get out of the way so that the soul can sing its being into clear air for all to hear. Children sing these songs as do mothers and fathers – lovers of life sing like this as do ones who have learned to listen to rainbows and butterflies, those who dance with hope on their, still, reaching fingers. I have heard this song many times, echoing in my mind, my memory of friends who have passed mingled with questions of why am I still here, why they have gone on, on dusty wings. Your work here, in this contest is so very welcome, thank you.
Blessings and best wishes,
~r.
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Ed, thank you so much for entering your poem, “Dusty Wings” into my contest, Breast Cancer Awareness, it is an honor to have your work posted here and your voice and unique perspective is a welcome addition. This is a boilerplate note that I place on all poems entered to let you know I have reviewed your poem and have made my initial observations. Please feel free to add to or modify your poem as I will make my final assessments after the close of contest. I will judge the contest approximately ten days after that and will make any additional comments at that time. Thank you, again, I truly do appreciate your effort and wish you best of luck in the contest.
Blessings and best wishes,
~r.
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wow this was an amazing and touching poem and it brought tears to my eyes as it held so much truth and heartfelt emotions in it.
this was just wonderful
well done
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Very good, a touching poem, with lots of heartfelt emotion and passion in the words, I loved the last lines, and you have a slight advantage cos I'm in a shit mood haha, best of luck
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This was written for the children in the cancer ward at St. Judes.
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This is so sad.......I loved your form and It really tugs on my heart strings..When I pen can do that to me it is good!!! Great job on this..............I loved it....
Smiles
your way >>>>>>>>>>> Sandy 
San-d
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A beautiful emotion and deep imagery escapes your very words. Thank you for sharing
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hmm. This is very spiritual. Now I wanna go meditate. Well it was pretty good. I wish you the best.
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“Listen to the quiet whisper that speaks from your heart.
I am there."
"Smell the sweetness that lingers in my hair as I lay here.
I am there."
"Touch the softness of my cheek as the silence grows.I am there."
These stanza stood out the most..It brought tears to my eyes
reading your poem..It is really beautiful..and I thank you for entering..Good luck Brenda -
I think this is a beautifully written piece sad yet full of hope. Well done and keep up the good work. Best of luck in the contest
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This is beautifully written. I hope you win because you really worked hard on it. It seems like you did anyways. Two thumbs up.
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Very good
Very nice. Nice to remind others that though we grieve, we are moving on to a better place. I always have wondered why Christians do not rejoice at death, when it takes us to be with our Maker. -
This is beautiful and I think that the family will pull much comfort from this. Thank you for your beautiful addition. You have added to a great cause and I thank you greatly.
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Hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm...........BRILLIANT!! much loved by me. Lovely. Best of luck in my contest. xx God bless xx
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Very well done.
Wow and I imagine that this one had to be hard to write as well, and that happens when you are writing about something like cancer and its effects on the people that you love. I would definetly pick this one to advance. You put into words what I think that my mother would say to me. And has. -
This is very touching, I think that you have done a very good job with this and I wish you luck in the contest.
Criss -
inspired work
This is truly an inspired work. Full of Compassion and Grace. I am there...I am there...I am there...I am there...I am there
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usually i am one of the first to read and enjoy your poems and usually i find them to be so utterly breathtaking you have no idea how hard it is to comment on your poems, they are that good, thats why all my comments are so short, but not this time...dont feel discouraged, your poem is beautiful, just as all your others have been, but in an entirely different way.ive never considered you to be one to write hardly any form of dark poetry, not to say that this is dark, but this poem was....i guess you would call it, my eye-opener.honestly i know the horrors of cancer, my gramma died of it when i was really young, but it really truly showed me the mixed feelings of that same morbid-hope you have just before the serial killer kills you.and my reason for saying all this is lately ive lost most of my hope, in everything, and i almost did something really stupid, and your poem has really helped, it makes me feel like i have a chance, and that i CAN be something, so thanx you...
much luv and good luck,
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this truely spoke to my soul...your words are soft and meaningful here...i have a son who is a cancer survivor, and i thank God that his time to fly away has not yet happened, my selfish desire for him to stay here....
i commend you on this very beautiful poem, we really are able to love so deeply that we never really leave those that keep us in their hearts. journey on, i am so glad our paths crossed here. -
Oh make me cry. This is so absolutely deeply touching. Your words reveal a beautiful soul.
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awesome
This poem is unbeliveable...omgsh it is like the best poem i have read in a long time...You are very gifted and I am sure if you keep writting poetry you will go very far in life... Well written! -
That was such a sweet encouraging poem. I thought you used great imagery, which made the message of your poem that much better. I think my favorite metaphor was the one about dusty wings. You did a wonderful job. Best wishes in the contest.
~Laura~
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a worthy write from a great empathizer.
This is just so lovely, another one I'd like read at my own wake. Well kiddo its a four, for sure, and I thank you so much for responding to the pathos in such a way. This is wow. Hugs Ann, Sorry i've been bawling over poetry since I came home from school and words just don't seem enough. Ann 4L
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wow !
absolutely moving poem !
you have brought out the pathos of the situation so well
u deserve a pat as much as they deserve love
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