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Eye of the Storm

Hurried energy like the discharge of lightening
Flashes as I labor upon the trail;
My path of pure unbridled chaos.

I find myself amidst the storm.
The eye is just ahead, I can feel its silence,
My vision a blur of emotions, thoughts and passions.

All dreams vanish in the wake of the rolling thunder;
I’m to be struck down if I stay here long,
Lead me to that center pushing harder ever more.

The quiet eye where tension is my friend.
My soaked mind watered down with daily trials
Can not filter through my deepest needs.

I lay hidden in the storm. . . as the others
Those that know me, need me, want me can not see
But a rolling cloud of danger approaching them.

My chaos swallowing all around;
Feasting on the flesh of my dreams,
Leaving me to fight the weather alone.

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Written April 30th, 2005

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  • Shadowteller
    June 9, 2005
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    Great poem, I love the stanzas of the last three triplets. The "The quiet eye..." and then to "I lay hidden in the storm..." then lastly to "My chaos..."


  • vampira1665 silver member
    June 9, 2005
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    Now that was awesome. I truly got into the piece. Excellent work here.

    Hugs and bites, Lady Raven


  • June 8, 2005
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    wow! that was breath taking! (haha) I like the part that said: "All dreams vanish in the wake of the rolling thunder;" how vivid! thanks for commenting on my poem and please continue!
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