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Springtime Eve - Sonnet #26

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The muted colors of a springtime eve
Arrest my eyes and ease my wearied soul.
A mystic world of dreams and make-believe,
That wraps me up and seeks to make me whole.


 

A soothing cloud of mist surrounds this glade,
Where I have come to find my peace and rest,
And in the coolness of the cov'ring shade,
My spirit voices only one request.


 

That in the fading light as sight grows dim,
A rest from all of life's prevailing stress
May not be just a fondly passing whim,
But lasting joy that I may now possess.


 

In peaceful darkness of approaching night,
I settle in to sleep, until the light.

Author notes

I chose option #3, hope and also used much from #4, nature.

In our stressful world, the thought of a quiet, misty, and shaded glade, where I can lay down and rest gives me comfort and hope for the tomorrow.  If I can't be there physically, I can allow my mind and spirit to go there.
Written June 3rd, 2005

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  • SimpleSarcasm
    June 6, 2005
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    What a marvelous piece you've written. I thoroughly enjoyed every word.
    I'm not a sonnet writer but I sure do appreciate those who are.

    Wonderferful, just wonderful.

    ~Dee


  • mystiqstranger
    June 4, 2005
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    this is beautiful Paul...i need a place like this about right now...the imagery is wonderful i can almost see it in my minds eye...mind if i borrow it for the weekend?...lol...good luck in the contest
    God Bless
    Tyler


  • Touchof1der silver member
    June 4, 2005
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    Reading through your lines here and looking at the picture, I was very much taken back to a place I use to take the youth group I once led. It's called "Biblical Gardens" and there are all these life size stone statues that depict the most notable moments of Christ's life. At the beginning of the tour, naturally is his birth and it ends at the ascension. It's the most incredible hike you can imagine. There are many places to sit and "meditate" along the way that look very much like the image you have posted here. This is awesome father of my daughter!
    ♥ Kimberly


  • CountryCousin
    June 4, 2005
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    Loved this sonnet

    I was attracted to this title in the featured section and so I decided to see if it was what I thought it would be. And it was and so much more. I loved the graphic and it fit this truly lovely piece of poetry. It was more than worth the read and I must say that I am delighted to have read it.


  • B Chandler
    June 4, 2005
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    A soothing cloud of mist surrounds this glade,
    Where I have come to find my peace and rest,
    And in the coolness of the cov'ring shade,
    My spirit voices only one request.

    That in the fading light as sight grows dim,
    A rest from all of life's prevailing stress
    May not be just a fondly passing whim,
    But lasting joy that I may now possess.
    .....oh man sug this poem was just mind blowing and i loved it but two stanzas just had gotten glued in my head good luck in the contest ur in


  • pink-roses gold member
    June 4, 2005
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    wow that is lovely - makes me think of fairy tale woodlands - a lovely mixture of nature and personal feeling. Good luck with the contest!
    pinkxxx

  • Only To This Paper
    June 4, 2005
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    Wow this is really nice. I love the flow and its just so wonderful! I love the meaning too. Its like there is a place where you can go in your mind but really be there but still the thought of such a place calms you down and gives you hope. Very nice!
    Lost in life,
    xshadowxgirlx


  • Wandika gold member
    June 4, 2005
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    The sonnet is very well done, Followed the rules and the imagery was great. The picture set the mood just right. Jim


  • Kochibo
    June 4, 2005
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    Great write!

    Oh this is exquisite! I really like where you;re coming from... The soothing sleep in a lush glade, I wanna go to sleep now! Great write, the imagery was wonderful. It was a nice simple, not-too-deep-so-that-it-makes-your-brain-hurt, poem, yet very eloquent and masterfully written. Great job, keep up the excellent work! Love tons,~
    ~Leasha *now sleepy* LOL, good job...


  • Fridays Child
    June 4, 2005
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    OOHH A SONNET!!! Beautiful structure, every line has ten syllables, something I have problems with, and the imagery in this piece, not including the picture, are absolutely amazing! (Line sevn could have 11 syallables depending upon how many syllables you think "coolness" has; personally, I think it has three, but when one says "coolness" it comes out as two so...) This is amazing! You are a brilliant writer, and you seem to have mastered the sonnet in this work, although I'm not sure about iambic pentameter in some lines. Oh well, iambic pentameter is brutally hard sometimes, I'll give you the benefit of the doubt lol This is a wonderful piece!! Never give in, Annandhel.

  • godzvayne
    June 4, 2005
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    Tres bon!

    This poem is really good. I like "sonnet" form. It reminds me of Shakespeare. I love the imagery and the fact you could weave nature into a really hard type of poem. I like the picture that goes along with it, it is very beautiful and fits the sonnet you waote about it perfectly. Keep up the beautiful writing, I look foward to reading more stuff from you!

  • ripplesonwater
    June 4, 2005
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    This piece is really awesome...I'm sure lots of people have told you that. I know from experience that sonnets can be excrutiatingly difficult to write, and a lot of times the rhymes end up stretched and silly-sounding, but this one is just amazing. Your imagery is beautiful, your story well-told, and all the sonnet technicalities are carried out with such skill that they are hardly noticed - which is how it should be. The flow of the whole thing is so smooth, which only adds to your description of a calm, beautiful place.
    I am in awe of this poem...it was wonderful and a pure joy to read!!

  • LaBelle
    June 4, 2005
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    This is beautiful, what lovely imagery. Wouldn't it be nice to be stress-free? I love sonnets because they're the perfect length and they flow so well. Anywho, this was great except for one line, "But lasting joy that I at last possess." Doesn't sound right because you used "last" twice. But besides that this rocked!


  • His Shoulder Angel
    June 4, 2005
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    Beautiful!

    Ohh...this was so pretty! I can just imagine it. Very calming.


  • ForeverKimberley
    June 4, 2005
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    Ok, wicked work. You so gotta teach me how to write sonnets. I just can't get the hang of it and it's driving me crazy cause everyone else is writing them like pros. But yeah, great work. Loved it.

  • crazybaby4eva911
    June 4, 2005
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    great

    wow your sonnets are amazing,.....In peaceful darkness of approaching night,
    I settle in to sleep, until the light. i love this line, it is so pretty and so beautiful...keep up the good work! i loved reading this sonnet. You really do have a way with words!
    love, rachel

  • Veil of Winter
    June 4, 2005
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    Very, very nice. I like the term usage. Cheers!


  • M.A.King
    June 4, 2005
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    Your sonnets are absolutely exquisite. When I meditate or try to sooth myself to sleep I use images of places such as this. You capture a paradise, peaceful and lovely. Delicious descriptions that flow in an impeccable meter. I truly enjoyed the reading of this beautifully written sonnet.


  • SexyAngel0418
    June 4, 2005
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    This is a very lovely write Grampa!!! You did a great job on this one... This is so descriptive that I can just picture it in my mind!!! Great job!!! Good luck in the contest!!!

    Hugs,
    Beth


  • pattyann4500
    June 3, 2005
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    This is really lovely, Paul. It is sometimes nice to just let the world go its own way while we shake off the stress, and this was just perfect. You have such a marvelous way with words. Hugs, Patricia

  • Malzy
    June 3, 2005
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    Hey!!
    This reminds me of Ryan, he used to get these stomach pains constantly, and would meditate, he described the place he'd allow himself to go to it was just so peaceful and such, and he realized how stressed I was and would suggest I do it too, sometimes I just can't clear my mind and it just wouldn't work, others I'll just be so relaxed its crazy. I like to sit there with my back against a wall for at least ten minutes before I go to bed just doing some breathing excercises. Great write grampa
    Malzy

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