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look

do you look at the smile,
and not see the pain?
do you look at the knife,
and not see the severed vein?

do you look at my heart,
and not see the broken bits?
how can you look in my eyes,
and not see the endless pits?

can you look at my empty soul,
and say it wasn't a heinous theft?
why can't you look at my life,
and see there's nothing left?

Author notes

another shitass day, another shitass poem.
as always...questions, comments, suggestions, or whatever are welcome.
Written June 3rd, 2005

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  • Splyph
    July 6, 2005
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    Great

    I just had to come and read this one again cause I LOVE IT.......keep em comin

  • Beautiful Tragedy
    June 12, 2005
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    this is really good. short but sweet! i liked the rhyming and how it was simple but profound at the same time. i enjoyed reading!
    -Kaitlin

  • Splyph
    June 6, 2005
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    Kickass

    AAAHHHHHH SHIT!!! I LOVE THIS ONE!!!........This is absolutely fucking AWSOME and that's that.You know this aint a piece of shit so don't even be saying that.You make me proud....ever so proud.....kickass......kickass.....hell yea.....seriously this is your best one so far.Now I know you're warmed up and can't wait to see what comes next....KICKASS