Do you sleep-
ever- do you slumber?
Stroll or run
the watermark to
land with the hamstrings
of metric feet
clicking, tapping
never napping,
Do you wander in
your sleepwalk
near an open flame
before you wake
do you,
do you verse
from an abundance
of some mystic source
of course,
you do,
don't you?
do you, now and then
lay down the pen,
eat or find
the bowl of content
off any other table.
Ever, does your heart
bo peep
do you,
ever, do you
sleep?
Author notes
Inspired by the prolific and exacting verse forms of Erin Thomas. See his work and learn.
allpoetry.com/poets/Erin%20Thomas
Written June 3rd, 2005
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A delightful poem you have here, sets my mind a wondering and wandering....here is a belated hoodwink from myself and the group the poetic bandits!
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well written
wow, the author does a great job. Imagine an archer shooting a target and hiting the bullseye. lovely, truely well written, and yes us truly dedicated few, get sleep, its just during the times you happen to be doing other things and we can sneak in a wink...he he -
i like it it very powerful and emotional
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thought provoking
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I like the way you always put meaning behind your work and give the reader something to ponder upon. I also like the way you gave reference in your author comments so we might learn something new thats awsome I will check it out
wonderful work as usual. 
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I like your poem,how it has alot of meaning but it's straight to the point,Keep Going.
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Thank you for your reading my work, and I don't know how to explain this one except in these September years of mine...
I'm relaxing to a more clear observation and the files of rhythm and rhyme just jump in more. Finally! I'm brain-washed..hehehe.
for you
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Another brilliant piece of yours that I've read, the rhythm of this one was undeniably excellent. Love the background too. You must have an excellent ear and a superb eye for words to have created a piece such as this.
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Dee-light-full
This so fits...wow! You got the recipe and cooked it just right. Heck...I didn't even know there was a recipe! Wait. Maybe poets are sometimes cut of a like cloth. A delightful and teasing read. Charming. Peace Through Love. ET -
Good questions in your poem ... I like how you repeat through out it ... it has a message that all readers should be able to think about and relate to ... great job expressing yourself! ... Mz
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I love the repetitive rhythm. That's what stood out to me first and made it really nice to read. This is the kind of poem I can almost hear being read aloud to an audience. I like how the poem seems to be directed right at the reader, making it personal and giving it impact. It had a strong, subtle message. I really liked reading.
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yes, i do
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superb
i am a first time reader of ur poems and i liked that one! i hope ur other ones are as good as that... i found it a bit confuseing at first but then i read it over and it made more sense. I liked how u ended it with a question very superb! great job!
Jackie
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How very neat! Thank you for reading and commenting. I must admit...I'd love to know who this person is that referred my work. Yes...this place and other forums have carved new features in the heart that was waiting for its features. Neat, huh?
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Well-well I have read a couple of your early poems through a friend of mine who liked your poems enough to write a short tribute.
And the progression you have made... the writing of the last year or so makes for glorious reading.
This poem is a sort of tribute to meter to. It goes down like warm honey on a winter's morning.
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Wow
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^_^ I really like this. Your way of starting the stanzas is creative, and your word choices are perfect. It surely hooks the reader. I'll be sure to check Erin Thomas out, he must be very talented, just as yourself. Keep up the fantastic work, and Blessed Be.
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Thanks, Bezoar....! You're so kind. I only know how many folks respect his pursuit of the art of poetry. I like to be the one in the corner that notices...ever since I was on that stupid dunce cap chair in 4th grade. Only one person didn't laugh.
Merrily, CookieZeal/DB
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Hello Cookie, This is such a treasure that you have penned!
How have you been? I hope that you don't think that I have forgotten you, things have been difficult for me lately but i am rising above it all slow but sure!!! So happy to be back and to read your lovely words!!! ~Laura
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LOL. I wonder about these questions myself frequently. Thank you for writing Erin such a fantastic little poem. He speaks so fondly of you.
~Bezoar
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Well this is a good one for sure. And yes i do other thing beside writting and reading poetry, I love the way you pose this poem as to be asking quetion. that was a really good ideal
I thingk that you did it well. i enjoyed this poem of your thank you for shareing it -
...I mean READ and critique
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Well!
Now THAT explains a lot..Heh.
Being a Greeter here, my name stays in the list for over 20 mins after I get off, and then I miss some requests to the Help Desk, with which we are responsible.
I like your response and just wanted you to know that, in spite of my lack of responding to some of your emails since the Starlite days, I've never wanted to not hear what you've got in the pot cooking.
As for your means to live, heck! There's always WalMart and serving jobs. They're very en vogue these days. Seems folks are always shopping to extend their entertainment venues, and going out to eat to taste them.
I'd be pleased to have you write and critique (Level 2) any of my work as well.
Bless you and may the Lord be Your constant witness to your nearly unbelievable practicality and pursuit of the word art.
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CookieZeal!
well... well, i do sleep, more than i'd like to actually. the question you should ask is "do i make a living", and the answer to that is "no", hence the time i have for my studies as well as sleep. lol don't ask me how i live. some higher being seems to be managing that for me.
i lay down the pen, too,
to read. just wish i could read faster and retain more.
very nice tribute here. you've seen my work progress from rambling free verse to what it is today, since the days of the starlite cafe with sharon o'neal if i'm not mistaken (she has a profile here you know but i forget what her id is).
i like the "hamstrings of metric feet" image. that one's fun.
i don't know what's driving me, or if it will amount to anything of value, even remote value, but for some reason i'm happier pursuing my art as a "poet" than i have ever been pursuing anything else.
as for "an abundance of some mystic source"--i should show you one of full project poem docs sometime. i think you'd get a kick out of reading through the whole thing with all the notes. over the years i've developed methods that help me keep my creative processes going. one such method is to just free associate when i'm not sure where i'm going or what i'm going to write, and this invariably leads to material that i get to use in a poem.
well... guess it's time for me to finish this comment on ethereal-dust's "Ship of Fools" poem. got the meters all identified, now i need to go through and offer thoughts on the stanzas.
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Charming work
Dearest Dianne
I will surely go look at the work of Erin Thomas ... Thank you for this lovely indicator.
Myra -
Forever the mystery and mystical question beautifully stated.
( for me there is no fire and eating, only an obstacle to prevent my continuity. )
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