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A Blood Drop

A
Single
Blood drop
Falls from my
Eyes as they shed
Tears of sorrow,
Pain, and loss

Author notes

Another concrete poem. This is supposed to be shaped like a blood drop.
Written June 1st, 2005

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  • Jamais Oublier
    August 28, 2005
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    that was awesome. lah.
    dyei


  • Angelflower
    June 7, 2005
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    This was really good.. and it does look like a blood drop.. weird.. good write hun..


  • Touchof1der silver member
    June 4, 2005
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    This definately resembles a drop of blood and just as punkrocksmidge pointed out above, the message is very clear. Such sad, sad poems.
    ♥ Kimberly


  • punkrocksmidge
    June 1, 2005
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    Hmm... interesting. I'm always up for a good concrete poem, and can certainly appreciate them more after trying a few myself I think the vocabulary was a little simple, but other than that, the message was strong, and the image was clear. Nice work, and keep writing, dear
    ~Smidge~