you're looking up at me
tears are welding in your eyes
this pain is too much to bear
i don't want to say goodbye
all the time we spent together
was nothing of a waste
and each one of your kisses
was an unforgettable taste
we had dreams together you and i
of love and family
but now we our separating
oh god how can this be
i give you our final kiss
and both of us know
that if it were up to us
neither would chose to go
i can't think of the words to say
so i'll hold you close and tight
you will be with me forever
i love you, my love, goodnight
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Written June 1st, 2005
A contest entry
- OPen mind[s] by mascararunning.
300 points, ended August 19, 2005, 16 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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congrads on second!
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aww this is really awesome.
Danielle -
Oh this is depressing...the feelings are once again so raw and full of emotion that it was like you were saying this in person to me. You are a truely amazong poet please never quit writing. ~Courtney
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Amazing :)
AWWWWW This poem was really sad. I loved it though. Its sad but amazing. I know how you feel here, I went through this once. Yeah heartbrakes suckl and love is a powerful thing
But this poem is truley amazing, it rhymes so perfectly. Great work!!!!! Dont stop the awesome writing!!-BB
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My friend. You are truely talented. I know what you are going through... but I can tell you only one thing. You WILL HURT for a long... long... long time. This pain you feel now... will eventually subside. Until then stay posative... for many dark thoughts will come. Best of luck to you and your future. Adieu. -
Aw, this is so sad.
If this was a personal poem, I'm really sorry this happened. bunny, love hurts, and it takes time to get over the one you loved or once did. It's a slow painful process we all go through, and I hope you don't suffer too bad.
I have a friend on here whose going through hell with her brake up. She's been sad for weeks, and I feel so bad. Sometimes you want to be with someone so much, but once its over you wonder why you ever felt that way, and wonder why you spent all that wasted time with her/him.
Excellent poem, There was great passion, and emotion.
Much love.
love yaz, love allz
X- I applaud thee.
Edited on Jun 01, 4:51 p.m. because 'Typo!
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o my gosh its so sad but its great i love o my gosh it made me cry thats the seond time today a poem has almsotr made me cry and i think you have talent cause its awesome i love it
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