I lay there in your arms and
softly drift to sleep
There in my dreams
is the secret i keep
I want to say I love you
I want to show i care
But if I did
would you still be there
My heart pounds
with the thought of loosing you
would my love scare you away
or do you feel it to
Your hands touch me
As if the feelings are there
But they are unspoken
Do I see them in your stare
I want to shout it out
from the highest mountain top
Tell you that our time together
I want to never stop
For you I would walk
Through any raging fire
None of them are hotter
Then this burning desire
So I will tell you
Of this love that I feel
And with a kiss
my declaration I will seal
And hope for the ending
Of my own fairy tale
Author notes
Option 1
Written June 1st, 2005
A contest entry
- You Are My Only... by Ah.Sosha..
400 points, ended March 25, 2006, 58 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This was a very beautiful piece, however your rhymind scheme is messed up at the end and leaves you hanging. I don't know if you did that on purpose or what, but I thought I would let you know because it stuck out to me. This piece was very yearnful. Thank you for entering, and good luck !
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sosha -
thank you Eusebius your Kind words touch my heart Niki
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Bravo!
Again an superb sense of meter, a fine, fine poem. Great! -
Thank you Natari
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Good
Great job Niki..You wrote a heartfelt piece
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Drk as always I can count on you for a glowing crituqe Miss ya hun we gotta chat some time Niki
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Thank you Milani I am glad you enjoyed it Niki
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Very nice job Niki, I always expect nothing less then that from your writes. Keep penning.
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Beautiful, heartfelt, emotional. This had a deep yearning in it, it wasn't forced but spoken from the heart. I loved this Luv Niky x
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Great Work
I liked this piece very much it is soft and heartfelt.
Great work
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Good luck in the contest! It was a heartfelt bit of poetry that takes your breath away. Now that you have that tatu pic i am singing their song! funny, huh! Well, great job!
-Ari
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Nice picture of T.A.T.U.-Curtis Meyer
PS Please feel free to read any/all poetry posted on this site by k-dense (myself) -
anyone whosticks a tatu pic on their poem makes me glad putin has such a stalin hardon. to the gulag with you!
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Thank you i am glad you liked it Niki
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So heartfelt! I could feel the yearning inside you and it came across beautifuly in this nice piece. Great write!
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