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Common Tanka

Love and innocence
Hatred, the deceit of friends
Can be lost and found
Betrayed time and time again
As all is loved and hated

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It's just about love, hate, and friends
Written May 31st, 2005

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  • Angel Baby
    June 1, 2005
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    A tanka is a poem that consists of 5 lines with a pattern of syllables that go - 5:7:5:7:7 - you should try one. they are hard to do though!
    Love Always
    megan


  • Jenn-Swenson
    June 1, 2005
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    hey meg yeah im with charles on that one, what is a tanka??? lol. but i like your poem i can relate to it and i have felt like that with friends before. great job and ita short lol keep it up!
    -Jenn


  • Charley-
    May 31, 2005
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    Hey Meg


    Whats a tanka? Just wanted to say i like your piece but clueless on what a tanka is so what is it?
    Well gg on this piece ttyl sometime Charles

  • FrozenEnigma
    May 31, 2005
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    I understand how hard it is to work with tankas. I myself spend at least an hour on each one I write, and they are only five lines. :-) With this poem, I felt it was too vague to really get any real insight or meaning out of it. It didn't feel complete because it was missing too much. I felt that you tried to cram in too much into one, short, restricted poem. :-\ But I understand how hard it is, so there's not much room for me to talk. I hope you keep working with them. They're very good for evolving your poetry.