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Not Want For More

Missing image
the kind decadent One
with the red scars
gave me keys to a place
where clouds are curtains
under velvet awnings,

where moons have eyes
in Orion bathing waters-
bedding me on a soft astro plane
with laughing company -
the golden Cherubim.

I'm graced in a constellation
as arms to thaw the tomb I'll leave-
burning stars for kindle
forever burns
with Love as it
first began.

Author notes

Oh, Jesus, where would I ever want to look for more?
Written May 31st, 2005

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  • Laurili
    June 25, 2005
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    very pleasent and written from such a strong, placid site within i'm sure. such an enjoyable read. you have a very solid rythem which always aids thoughts in their journey to find an understanding audience.
    l-.


  • myrataal silver member
    June 4, 2005
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    Divinely CookieZeal&God

    Oh dearest Heart!

    Gracefully, yet childlike, you love Him ... And yes: ancient He is, and every YOUNG.

    And WE love, because WE are ONE in HIM.



    Myra


  • Rose Patrick
    June 2, 2005
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    this was so grand of a poem there is not any real words to say that give it true justic .So all I can say is that I like it so very very much. But then i always enjoy your poem and that is a fact. thank you for shareing it

  • kikibaby
    June 1, 2005
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    This is truly beautiful, you write with such encouragement and hope and love! This is amazing and I am guessing I am not to far off when I say that you are in love with whom most people are so scared of! Great write and God bless!


  • Sherry gold member
    May 31, 2005
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    Yep very good hope I wasn't to picky on that word ya did it ((((((((((Cookie))))))))))Love ya
    Edited on May 31, 10:57 p.m. because ''.


  • truembrace
    May 31, 2005
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    Such a lovel write Cookie. Often writes of such an inspirational content are cliche' and sacrifice strong poetic voice for repetition. You write in such a way on the strength of your relationship that there's no mistaking as to how close you are to Him and the words are as unique as any I could imagine using.

    These are the writes that I can't and won't even dream of competing with.


  • CookieZeal Greeters member
    May 31, 2005
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    Yes. I toyed with that. But it keeps coming back in. I am probably going to let it breathe. You're probably right...but Names won't be in it...just another reference. Thank you for noticing and your honest critique

  • Sherry gold member
    May 31, 2005
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    So lovely Cookie, its beautifuly written and comforting to read it leaves a person in knowing that peace you are in.
    I mean in reading and its reflection if I'm saying it right
    and the love of the closeness you feel with the Lord.

    I would only change one word old to maybe humble due to the
    fact it sounds like your calling him old (God or Jesus)? Other wise its a masterpiece and flavored very nicely I wouldn't change anything else. ♥ Sherry


  • Vickie J
    May 31, 2005
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    So beautiful, Diane. It's got this magical feel to it that takes the reader to a higher plane. It's almost like I don't want to say anything so as not to disturb this description or moment in time (if that makes any sense). Again beautiful, eloquently written...vj

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