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Calling

 


I'm here at hand and never shall I go,
before your eyes and whispering in your ears -
I'm calling, but it seems that you don't know;
take heed of me and let me ease your fears.
I listen and I long to dry your tears,
I yearn to take you into my embrace;
yet you have chosen for these many years
to grasp at emptiness I could replace.
The pain that's past, no power can erase,
but used to grow, your hurt can be redeemed.
No limit can be found to heaven's grace,
accept my love, believe that you're esteemed.
Your eyes are dark, your ears are closed to me,
why stumble so, for now you can be free.


Author notes

Option 2: Faith
'Hope is a thing with feathers'
I commented on Make The Most of Every Day by Maureen

This is a Spenserian sonnet, iambic pentameter, abab bcbc cdcd ee.
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sonnet#Spenserian_sonnet

Thanks Wanda for silver in your contest.
Written May 30th, 2005

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  • MargaretG
    June 27, 2006
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    You are welcome, sweetheart. If you only take care of yourself as if you are precious and beloved, that is enough. It becomes real all by itself.


  • pandora ink
    June 26, 2006
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    Thank you for sending me this link, Margaret. I will bookmark this one so I can keep reading it when I get down and out and think God doesn't care.


  • MargaretG
    June 7, 2005
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    Thank you for your detailed consideration Hugh, I will certainly reconsider the punctuation in view of your comment. I have been very pleased with the reception of this sonnet.


  • hugh wyles silver member
    June 7, 2005
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    Dear Margaret,
    This is a really amazing sonnet in that it's message can be applied to so many facets of personal life, belief or faith.
    I must say that the comma is somewhat over-used in my opinion,
    being unnecessary before "and" or "but" and in one instance I would have used a period rather than another comma.
    I hope you don't mind my being picky over the punctuation of such a well-worded and deftly constructed sonnet in which you have expressed compassion with assurance. Applause.
    Love and hugs, XXX Hugh.
    Edited on Jun 07, 6:04 p.m. because ''.


  • Maureen silver member
    June 4, 2005
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    Excellent! A pleasure to read!

    Your wonderful poem reminds me of the phrase "There but for the grace of God go I." I used to think that it wasn't fair that some had God's grace while others didn't but then I realized that it is up to each individual to accept God's grace..acceptance is the key!

    Very nicely done! Good Luck in the contest!

    ♥ Maureen


  • Sau
    June 2, 2005
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    Dear Margaret,
    A poem can say different things to different people, and to me it was about being able to see hope through someone else.

    It depends a lot on time, circumstances and personal cinviction to be able to share a positive vision. When cool, one can rationalize things, but it is the challenging times which test us, and to have someone who can show a positive window, is fortunate enough. This is a very reassuring sonnet, filled with hope and love.

    Thanks for sharing. Wish you best,
    Sau.


  • MargaretG
    June 1, 2005
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    Thank you Terry! How long it is since I have seen you online. I hope this means that you will be posting more poems.


  • Terry-too silver member
    June 1, 2005
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    How fitting that I should find the right poem on my re-entry after a long silence. (It was not my choice, but at last I hope to have left my old dial-up connection behind. I receive e-mail but cannot send yet.) Many friends have given up on me, so this sonnet was also written for me at such a time of loss.

    Odd how loss intensifies the value...

    It is the real function of great art to reach all who need to be reached. I note that this has to be one of the greatest, in the wide variety of messages it sends, and how well each fits.
    A great one MargaretG, perfect in its form and function!
    Best of luck in the contest!

    Terry

  • MargaretG
    June 1, 2005
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    Thanks Gennelle!


  • Maatkara gold member
    June 1, 2005
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    Beautifully written and expressed, Margaret!
    Wonderful dimension in the dual perspectives - to adopt a spiritual, metaphoric, or literal perspective. Brava!

    ~G


  • MargaretG
    May 31, 2005
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    Thank you Mary. That was my point of view in writing, in light of the faith I have now. However, each person brings unique experience to reading, and it is all good.


  • M.A.King
    May 31, 2005
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    I think many could see a personal experience in this wise and beautifully done sonnet. For myself I see my struggle to God. So much was within reach and I was unaware of my rich resources. This message may be unique to each reader. And no need to address the form, it is always superb.


  • MargaretG
    May 31, 2005
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    Thanks Mari, I'm very flattered that you and Yem have found a personal application in this, I see what you mean. I wrote about myself and a significant relationship, but I'm happy that the poem is saying more than I originally intended.


  • Mari Goes gold member
    May 31, 2005
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    I kind of agree with Yem here, maybe you know why
    It's amazing when we can relate so much to a poem we read, that doesn't happen much with me, but here, man! How many times I have repeated those same thoughts in the last 2 months to Mayne before he finally opened his door to hope...
    Terrific poem! I'd applaud it 10 times, acuttualy I'll somehow, applaud it more than once
    Kisses,
    Mari

  • MargaretG
    May 31, 2005
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    Thank you Del, you are a most sensitive reader and commentator!


  • MargaretG
    May 31, 2005
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    Dear Yem, I made that note, because I wanted to make it clear that I was not projecting my own perceptions on the reader. I took a step outside myself to demonstrate the persistence of the love that I have found.


  • DelWarrenLivingston silver member
    May 31, 2005
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    One thing I can count on when I come to visit MargaretG's sonnets is that she will chose the perfect sonnet form to depict the thoughts she is projecting. The interweaving lines of the Spenserian form is apt, here, because of the intertwining thoughts running thru the mind of the author. Especially well done, Margaret...glad I made my way to read this one and best of luck in the competition.

    s,

    Del


  • Yemassee gold member
    May 30, 2005
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    this is about me, I was "you")

    After reading the poem I'm intrigued at that line because I saw myself (and Mariza) in this poem, unless I was just finding my own message in it. The idea of one convincing another that they can be trusted to be let inside. There's certainly an emptiness in your words, potential which despite hope tends to wallow in seclusion. Sometimes you have to rap really hard on doors.

    Well I took a secular view and a personal one at that. Not sure if you intended it as more, but I guess only you can say that.


  • SEA angel gold member
    May 30, 2005
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    Inspirational

    "Hope is a thing with feathers" and faith is hope's wings. So rise up with the hope of angels and fly with your faith's wings. Be Blessed Always

  • MargaretG
    May 30, 2005
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    Thank you Lyrical. I enjoy the intertwined rhymes.


  • Lyrical Soul silver member
    May 30, 2005
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    A beautiful spenserian sonnet Margaret. I haven't wrote one in awhile but you may have inspired me to give it another try. Just beautiful.

    ~Lyrical

  • MargaretG
    May 30, 2005
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    Thanks for this opportunity, Wanda.


  • Night Hope gold member
    May 30, 2005
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    An amazing first entry into my contest, MG...I knew I could count on you...This is a wonderful sonnet, full of Grace & Love...well done, Lady...I am not surprised...Good luck, my Friend... Wanda
    Edited on May 30, 4:25 p.m. because ''.

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