And I will learn
through guitar and piano
the faintest falsetto
the hips on a cello
Pull, and push, I'm in no rush
But for the chorus
And it comes
As I reach the octaves
Selective
I'm not in this for the note,
but the verse
I am composed
never rehearsed
'Composed' mostly
Of myself.
Author notes
This is 'Power word freestyle'
your poem finds the word, you double
it at the end, the word here was
'composed'. And the freestyle must be organic.
Written May 29th, 2005
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Nice job!
Wow, this is really good... unlike anything I've ever read. You didn't exactly follow what the contest consisted of, but I did, infact, enjoy this poem. Really, really well done, and thanks for entering.
K
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I like the way that you have seemed to composed this piece about how you are one with music... atleast it is what it says to me. I like the last two lines in particular
Shari
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overall a great metaphor.
very original and the repetition style in this works - which is amazing because back to back normally lacks any kind of likeability. It's a nice style for this piece. -
Nope, curry pork.
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just mostly? must be just a touch of tuna salad in there.
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cello hips .. excellent.
Lisa
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I really liked this poem. I'm not into much music, but I could hear and feel the music in the words. You did an amazing job with bringing the words to life through their sound and rhythm. That takes true talent to do. :-) You're amazing.
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This is really great, you did a very good job. I have not heard of "Power word freestyle." It sounds very interesting. I'll go do some research on it and take a crack at it myself sometime.
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interesting - maybe i should check the contest out.
nice to see you playing with other variables and styles and experimenting. keep'r up! -
People are afraid of me franky, I have MAGIC, and free asshats.
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Dear miji, I cannot write anymore...
the lord jesu took my arms in a horrible accident
that accident was THE NEW TESTAMENT. -
why haven't you got comments on this yet?? it's beautiful, and thoughtful, a new way to look at things.
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Interesting poem. Learning and being yourself from music?
Keep writing, Miji -
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