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Skin

Skin upon skin
rain upon ocean
tears upon pillows
bone upon velvet
breath upon windows
skin upon skin

Author notes

another
short
but not empty
poem
Written May 29th, 2005

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  • venus182
    May 30, 2005
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    refreshing

    not empty at all. Others would try to fill up the page because they feel that the longer it is, the more "deep" it will be. It reminds me of my favorite phrase "simple elegance" and it is simply that.


  • tazzy5
    May 29, 2005
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    great poem it's short but has so much meaning i really liked it great job and keep them coming

  • daisychainprincess
    May 29, 2005
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    this is great
    your right, its short, but definatly not empty.