the deepest sincere love if anyone did
it was me who did it for you
with days and nights passing by
my love all the more stronger grew
i dreamt of you each day and each night
your memories like breath i held on so tight
that day i still remember
when all of a sudden you told me
"sweety its true i loved you once
but i am sorry that love no more i see"
saying this you went off uncared unbothered
but within me i knew my heart was clottered
the next very day in thats gurl's arm
i saw you walking down right like minglers
i was standing right there in front
but you crossed me as if we were strangers
you went pass by me..my heart terribly broken
my life my world so teriibly shaken
each day my breath became a trouble to me
a burden which each moment i had to bear
i cried each night the terrible pain in me
but i know you never did ever care
you had your life and now i was your past
which you forgot in a second,your sweet cast
i have realized you were the one but not the ONLY ONE
i now came to know that i could live still this way
i might not be able to forget you....never
but i know i can make myself a better day
i have recovered even if i dont have my man
i know i have A LIFE and i am LIVING IT AGAIN
Author notes
well just an experience about love......
inspired by the quote :
“I think I cried for days,
but now that seems light years away
And I'm never going back to who I was."
A contest entry
- Give Me Love[[Tainted]] by edit my world..
525 points, ended July 22, 2008, 34 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Welcome ladies and Gents by RawrSmileBabyPlz.
450 points, ended July 11, 2008, 77 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - been hurt? by broken-angel.
450 points, ended July 11, 2008, 4 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Quotes and Big Points!! by she still smiles x.
2000 points, ended August 7, 2008, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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This was great!! So powerful and moving..and I'm sure many, MANY other girls can relate to these feelings of angst and bittersweet pain. The last two lines spoke to me the most. I loved how you turned the poem around in the end..how it went from being hurt and lonely to stronger and determined to get your life back together. Wonderful job, good luck in the contest!!
<3
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Very nice poem about lost love...we have all been through that! I liked the ending cause it gives the brokenhearted hope for a brighter day!
congrats on the bronze and keep writing!!
darlintlc
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thank you very much
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congrats on your bronze trophy xxx
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thnx aot
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thanks for your entry,very heart felt, this is a great write xx
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"that day i still remember when all of a sudden you told me "sweety its true i loved you once but i am sorry that love no more i see" saying this you went off uncared unbothered but within me i knew my heart was clottered" LOVED that part to death the whole poem was ahmazing. Thanks for entering my contest i wish you the best of luck. Shelly
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Very heartfelt poem.I like how the reader can easily relate. With this last guy, I knew and liked him for like 2 years, my parents hated him b/c he was too old lol (he was 19 and im 16) but uh basically we both decided to break up b/c he had to go out of the state for college and then about a month later he meets some girl and decides he wants to marry her. Sucks horribly but hell im a tough one I'm over it haha. ANYWAY lol I really liked the end. I love the strong aspect, the knowing that you're strong and your moving on. I love that! Because thats how I am. Thanks so much for entering and good luck!
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I love the poem, but you have a lot of typos in it! You left out the a in each and holded should be held in the first stanza. In the second stanza, you need some rewording, but besides that...great job! I loved the poem and it had a lot of meaning to it! It goes so deep and I know how you feel. I was sneaking out with a boy, my parents weren't supposed to know! We went to the homecoming dance and he dumped me right there, w/o even telling me, he just danced with another girl, heads on shoulders. Then later, he told me it wouldn't work out. He was wondering why I was in tears before? It was because he was going behind my back to see her, and people were telling me this, but I would not believe it! Sorry to get personal! Great job on the poem!
Oh, and good luck in the contest!
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Good, you had nice imagery and a good flow. I can relate with my x. Thanks for entering.
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really good yaar......gr8...the ending was reallly nice and pretty sweet too....
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awesome
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