A glow
in those jade slits
drapes a charcoal veil
shrouding the prone form.
That figure stands
before a shadowed hall,
alone where
only his voice
resounds around him
like a midnight sonata.
The shadowed walls
that encompass
his private dark corner
echoes all that
comes out of his pretty lips.
And on that distant
door, opposite himself
hangs that smooth silver slate,
rewarding him with the visage
of his divine form...
His bright eyes
waver not from
his beautiful reflection,
numb and blind
to the worms and rats
feasting on
his sacred self.
Author notes
Just in case my poem was a bit vague, the smooth silver slate is a mirror. And this is a tribute to the mirror.
Back when I was young, I had the idea that another world eists on the other side, and in that, the "other" me is just waiting to pass through that surface and trade her cased life with mine. I still fear mirrors, though, for other reasons.
I chose to write about vanity because IMHO, all the other capital sins revolve around it or are somehow related with it. But, as I said, that's what I think 
Everything in this poem is a representation of how I imagine vanity, in its highest and worst stage. 
thank you all for reading
Written May 28th, 2005
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pride = vanity and lust = lasciviousness @.@ rather, that's what we were taught back during grade school and high school
but wow, i'm safe! *prances around* thank YOU guys so very much!
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Rachel-
Very nicely written. In fact, it was one of the best. The only issue that we would have hear is that vanity is not one of the seven deadly sins. I understand where you are coming from, though.
This was a nice write, just the same.
- Justin -
awesome
this is an awesome poem i loved it i hope everyone eventaully ends up writing like this gooooood job i aplaused it for you cuz it rocks lol c ya later
~Tori -
Personally I am scared of mirrors. I actually got bored reading it the first time, but the representation/meaning in the poem that you made mention of in your author's comments made me go back and read it again, and I liked it. Apart from I think you should change the font colour, it was good.
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good imagery .....i like your poem friend!
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Don't touch it.
Chilling piece. The mood was established at the very beginning. The imagery is clear and on point. It made me ponder....shouldn't we live our lives so that we are able to look ourselves in the mirror and be honest with ourselves. It would seem that some can't - others don't. Ah...sweet delusion. I hope that I am one of the lucky who can face my deeds and actions.
Awesome piece. Very provocative.
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Ever read "The Picture of Dorian Grey"? This reminds me of that for some reason. I enjoyed the strong images you have here, as well as the strong flow. Nice work all around.
Cheers,
Yossarian -
(: I have the vision that mirrors can be false, and lead to misconceptions, because they can often portray a warped image of ourselves. It's nice to think that it really is another world though. Great poem.
-Miji -
All the sins revolve around it! I think so too. This piece has great imagery, and the choice of of words shows that you put lots of thought into it. I enjoyed, I'm glad I read it. Thank you. Peace.
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Another world on the other side of the miror..I think that there is another world over there and that we're a completely different person there , if we're happy here we're sad there and so on , a tribute to a mirror..creative!I'd never do it because I hate what I se staring back at me..its seriously sort of creepy to think about.Keep up the good writting!loved this!
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lol I'm envying you right now! I really liked this. lol I don't know what else to say really besides the fact I liked it Good job 
Frances Lynn
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thank you very much i used "him" because... well, i honestly believe that guys could be just as vain as women. women just appear to be more vain because of all those cosmetics and similar stuff being advertized and marketed but i do agree that guys age more gracefully than MOST women and as for lust... people who "suffer" from lust do it for self gratification... or rather, that's what i think again, thank you so much
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I'm not sure lust falls under the vain category, but this is amazing...you made this come to life by using him,and his...I wonder why you chose a man.. as women are usually more prone to sway to vanity. Guys age gracefully...and women don't age..ever clinging to vanity. This has a dated presence, like a work hidden in an attic. Very well written...good luck Peace Muddy
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wah, ok @.@ i was having a hard time wondering what color i should use thanks so much tom
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Honey, I'd change the text color on this, it's very hard to read, i'll be back later to comment, i'm at work, and i have to check a bunch of people out, but font color should probably be white so we can read it, later
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Rach, how do you do it?
It was different indeed. I like the idea about the mirror and how it relfects whether there is another world out there. And if there is i would love to meet them soon Beautifully written.
Katy
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