leaves of change (haiku)
suspended, hanging
waiting for the end of time
hopes for one more day
time waits no more
and like autumns falling leaves
become a carpet
the world around us
spins and holds us in its grip
changing all our lives
as leaves turn to gold
we dream of another day
one more day to live
dee garner
november 24, 2002
Author notes
Written November 24th, 2002
In a list
A contest entry
- Patrners In Crime Group Contest APRIL - by Ephiphany by Partners In Crime.
300 points, ended May 1, 2008, 3 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Ooo, I really like this. Especially the carpet line. Great imagery.
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I love Haiku poetry and you did a great job with this .
I thought they blended do well.
Good Luck in the contest. -
Lovely entry, I do thank you so much
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These are excellent! The way the weave the cylce of life throughout. Each powerful separate and yet together they are a oblesik of divinty shining in splendor. I adore these
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Great Job!
I liked that. It was... comfortable. It's the type of poem that has the ability to meddle with past memories, diggin' it's hand in and pullin' out some random, yet familiar childhood memory... Very well done! -
This is awesome catz, and so beautiful, I got real pretty imagery in my head when I was reading this, well done, keep up the great work
best wishes as always
Moonstone Virgo
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I love haiku poetry, its such a beautiful way to write out words. You wrote this poem beautifully, and it speaks of such a good meaning. Keep on writing.
Blessed be,
LeFay -
Fantastic
Such lovely words and expressions in this wonderful 'ku that you have shared here with all. I love haiku and the idea of fall leaves, which I don't get to see many of here in the south, brings a tender thought and happy memories of back home and my childhood. Thank you for this little 'joy break' in my otherwise sort of dreary and pain-filled day.
Lily ~* -
Living day to day has always been a philosophy of mine. I do not try to think too far because if I do, thinking too hard about trying to organize myself for future years I may stumble for not letting life takes its way.
It is a splenderous work here, catz, you always have a way with touching my emotions without trying desperately to put across some overdone message, you place your words like rocks slowly building a church to the world.
Beautiful, Beautiful.
love to you,
James
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you touch in wisdom my friend
And have an understanding of nature herself.
I salute you with this!
I did enjoy this very much!
Keep penning on one stroke at a time!
Bill -
Good
THIS IS A BEAUTIFUL POEM AND THE GRAPHICS ARE EQUALLY AS BEAUTIFUL. A LOVELY MENTAL BREAK BEFORE I GO TO BED. THANK YOU.
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This one is lovely, with a touch of sadness only because the leaves die but the memories they leave and bring are beautiful....When they are changing colors you captured the feelings of autumn very well the beauty of the colors life they have and the joys they bring before they fall.....I liked the part about the carpet creative line..Never thought of them like this but they are much like one and to children once they have fallen can be used for fun jumping in them still bringing joy.
We dream another day one more day to live life is such a blessing itself a very pretty background...Sherry:O)
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excellent
A SUPERB write!!
I love nature and espeially this time of the year too. The neat thing is I can rake the leaves all up and use it for mulch. This is the only cheap alternative during dry times here in Australia to keep my plants alive. -
excellent
As leaves change their colors
Your poetry sings of the beauty
Of our aging years,
With a strong belief that
as we grow older,
We are more beautyful
Just like the colors
Of the Autumn leaves. -
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Wow..That makes me love autumn even more. :) I'm enjoying your work more and more with each poem I read.
Beautiful job.
~Ashlee -
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Mike's description has nailed it Dee, the floating feel. The last stanza offering the cyclic period of existance. Loved this piece -tj- -
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love it, feels like floating with the golden leaves, swept up in gentle breezes, not knowing where the land will be, caressed by cool air. -
excellent
awww beautiful .. goes right with the background :) -
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Oh you did it again. Nice like this. -
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Hey I like this ... often I find senryu/haiku series a little stilted, but I love the way you've put three ideas one into each of the first three senryus and then brought them altogether in the last ... excellent, I must read more .. ;-) -
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nice. 'have you ever walked when every step might be your last?' -
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beautiful haikus Dee!!! you captured the changing season beautifully!! absolutely amazing :)) -
excellent
I liked this lots. JC -
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A good piece here.
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This is beautiful!
Such pictures you have created in my mind with your words.
Nice work, pretty..;)
Blessings, ~~ Ce
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