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Love Scorched Numb

Quick to capture
         A fleeting wisp of a dream

How it was to feel
                     Alive...
                                 ...Alluring

A choking gasp
           Filling the silence
                    As memory slips away

Tears, unbidden
       Quench cheeks
 Unfamished
Angry red
   Scars on flesh
         Tinged eyes
                   Hollow

Love scorched numb

Life withered
                 Crumbled
                             Lost

Author notes

This is "Me" in a nutshell. If it doesn't make sense, then neither do I. I think a select few of you will understand it though.
Written May 28th, 2005

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  • TooRainbow silver member
    June 6, 2005
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    Bravo! Can I identify with this??!! It's impossible not to jump in so quickly when the lava looks so cool and inviting from up here! Nice piece!
    Sheryl


  • RomanticDreamer
    May 29, 2005
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    I really like this piece. And you're right, it describes you well. Bravo, my dear. The form works extremely well for what you are trying to get across, and the verb choices were excellently chosen! This piece is amazing!!!!! You always could rock my world!
    C