All i'm feeling is this weight,hate,let downs,and bad dreams.
That's what it seems tonight. I'm living a life that ain't worth livin',
cause the choices i made-not just giving.Damn sean the sun rise and fall,from inside these county cell block walls.Walls around my heart,feels like it's gonna break,cause i'm trailing down the path,not sure how much more i can take.I'm tyring to understand for my own sake. My souls turning black. TO MUCH SHIT, dunno if i can turn back.Is this better than feeling nothing at all? A good heart and soul starting to fall.I'm trying to face the pain that i've blocked away,but just like me,most the shits locked away.Mising you means missing me,what i use to be. I'm missing the feeling of sunshine on my skin,the warmth in my heart and on my face.What a waste.I'll find a way.Living without living, but my pride won't let me give in.God knows why i'm fearing the change,enraged inside,lost in the game.Now i mourn and pray,for the light of day.Hoping that when it comes,my blackness will run.Maybe my soul will feel the sun unwrapping the layers of blackness when it happends will bring back my joy and happiness MAYBE.
Author notes
Written May 28th, 2005
A contest entry
- My Second contest !!!YAY!!! by Moon Fighter.
300 points, ended August 11, 2005, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ~ Word Prompt~ by Frozentearz.
525 points, ended September 16, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I can see and feel the blackness in this piece. Thanks for entering and best wishes!
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Thank you for giving me the chance to enter
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Ahh you have brought rough emotions of black to the page perhaps breaking it down a bit into short stanzas
won't make the reader feel so overwhelmed with words as they enter your page
However your feelings are felt, thanks for joining in
warm thoughts.
Frozentearz -
this is a really good dark poem you have written here. Good luck in my contest
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wonderful job on this write! I love it alot and you are a really good writer...you made me feel you pain and confusion! I love it! good job and good luck!
~Bri~ -
A powerful free-write. I definitely can tell that there is a darkness tinged in this write, I knew there was just more than a pretty face. It's very powerful, keep it up.
Tim -
This is such an intense piece for all the emotional content. It's almost as if you have opened your heart and allowed it to simply spill across the page. Very sad and self reflective.
♥ Kimberly -
Great!
Well done, and expressed good too!
Thanks for sharing, and being you!
Please pen on!
-Timothy The Poetic Weaver
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This creates a very strong mood. I love dark poetry keep em comming!
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