It starts at my fingers and runs down my toes
A darkness that fills my entire being with shadows
A feeling like numbness is all that I feel
A darkness so choking, so engulfing
I am sure that it's real...
It occurred to me sometime
During my shadow session
That my fear of death,
Could be an obsession
Lost in oblivion,
On the living room floor
My eyes glaze over,
I don't want to play anymore
It starts at my fingers and runs down my toes
A darkness that fills my entire being with shadows
A feeling like numbness is all that I feel
A darkness so choking, so engulfing
I'm not sure that it's real...
I scare myself sometimes,
With what runs through my head
That I'd sooner kill a person
Than see an animal dead
Trembling from heart to soul
I'm lost and losing control
....My darkness...
It starts at my fingers and runs down my toes
A darkness that fills my entire being with shadows
A feeling like numbness is all that I feel
A darkness so choking, so engulfing
Please say that it's not real...
But I learn how to cope
I blame it on stress
I'm a good person inside,
More or less, but much more
Than less.. A little off balance
But sane to a satisfactory extent
Whole on the exterior,
But inside slightly bent
...My Darkness...
Is a apart of me,
I'm laying it out, so you can see
It doesn't make me wrong
It doesn't make me bad
It makes me honest, laying out
Every emotion, and feeling
Good or evil, sane or manic
With all the calm and panic
...My Darkness...
It starts at my fingers and runs down my toes
A darkness that fills my entire being with shadows
A feeling like numbness is all that I feel
A darkness so choking, so engulfing
I'm not afraid to deal...
...My darkness...
Author notes
It is what it is, it's out there and it's raw. Please don't give me therapy when finished reading it, that's not what I need. Comment on the piece, on the emotions, on the general feeling..It is what it is!
Written May 27th, 2005
A contest entry
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A good right, very enjoyable. Center please...that's the only thing.
Wonderful, wonderful write, excellently penned, writer. Now to do your newest, and you'll be finished!
Good luck in the contest! -
Enjoyed this piece, nice job !!
Thankyou for your entry
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excellent piece, worded so well, thank you for entering!
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This would be good with a dreary bass line and some somber drums. Nice write!
Best of luck in teh contest!
Cyb -
I adore the repetitive scheme in this. It was almost like reading a great song... I love the second stanza the most. This poem has great depth and should be known to the whole world.
Well Done, good luck
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That I'd sooner kill a person
Than see an animal dead
I feel the same. Embrace your darkness! Darkness does not always represent evil, and we are what we are. If you wrote this poem from the heart...
welcome to the darkside. Wonderful write! 
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Cool
This is something that I can relate to in many ways. I like this poem, I feel it was well written and I definetely enjoyed reading it!
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Thank you so much for sharing your pain with me. The emotions you descrive in this are very well played out.
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Well it sure is what it is, poetry drawn out from the soul. Darkness can engulf us all if we allow it, and there it should be the light, that is our guidance. Sometimes repetition doesn't work well within a poem, but here it gives your poem power, with well placed imagery. Perhaps it will win another trophy, it sure has deserved all the ones its won thus far. Thanks for sharing and good luck in this contest.
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THANKS....
This poem is amazing. A gifted writter you are... I will deffinatly keep this one in mind. I will compare the others to this one... I LOVE IT! THANKS FOR THE AMAZING ENTRY! -
I think you can conquer it. After all, once you can turn to the darkside, you surely can turn back to the light.
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Dammit. I've been trying to get offline all day. I just read the winning entries & now I have to go & write yet another poem. 
Visceral, deep...reality in the rough. Congratulations, Poet. Wanda
"There can be no shadows without the presence of Light." ~ unknown
(Sorry; couldn't resist.
I earned my screen name the hard way...I know where shadows lie...& where they lay, too.)
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i liked this...this is exactly what i'm looking for...raw, honest expression
great flow too
thanks for entering
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This is an interesting way to write something. The repeat of certain words in this poem worked... at least for me. Good job
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This was really good and I literally jumped with excitement! Thanks for entering
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this is amazing word choice is really good i can almost fell it running trought me
Thanks For Entering
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I LOVE IT!!! YOU ARE MOST DEFINATELY A FINALIST!! Good job
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It occurred to me sometime
During my shadow session
That my fear of death,
Could be an obsession
Lost in oblivion,
On the living room floor
My eyes glaze over,
I don't want to play anymore
Favoirite..Stanza.. this reminds me of Manhy from the Grim Adventures of Billy and Mandy.
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oooh, I really like this one! It sounds like a re-written children rhyme! Tihi, I'm so evil!
Welcome to the finalists list
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an amazing write.. o full of powerful emotions, sadness, and anger. That's what at least I got from it.. good luck
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I really enjoyed this poem. I can relate to the feeling of being consumed by darkness, and not being able to do anything to get rid of it. The repeated stanza added to the feeling of being unable to esacape the darkness. Since the poem always returns to that stanza, it shows how the darkness in the speaker's life remains with the individual, despite where that person goes / what that person does. Thanks for sharing.
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i love the repetition in this piece....it really adds on..p.s. I don't think you need therapy trust me if you read any of my pieces, you'd know! lol! Anyways, I thought this was a very outstanding piece, very descriptive and the emotion in it is just amazing!
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You did a great job saying you feelings,I really hope this is not your true feelings just a poem to write,nice poem about one's feelings.keep them a coming
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I liked: the full-on expression of this. Your personal meditations are interesting. This should build intimacy with your readers.
I disliked: how the format doesn't match up with your content. Darkness isn't chatty. Darkness is overwhelming, sparse, and skeletel. As such, your poem is a contradiction of sorts. -
Whoah! How you let out your emotions into such dark yet beautiful poetry is amazing!
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i like it its cool i feel like thta soemtimes darkness filling me up and ithink its awesome i comment mainly on poems that touch me and are good so this is aweomse
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This is a very emotional, expressive piece. Very well written. I enjoyed it very much. It may be a bit raw, but somethings a bit of imperfection makes things more intriguing, more chic, more human. Embrace the imperfection, because that sometimes how its best left.
Keep writng, Miji -
I woulnd't dream of trying to give you therapy... you'd pull me in! *g*
I love they way you have woven in the emotion. Great flow. Awesome read. Five stars... oh, wait, ap doesn't do that anymore... -
Give you therapy? 0-0'' ~quickly hides her writing pad~ Damn! Took all the fun out! LOL
Just kidding. Yes, the piece is a little raw, but I think that that is indicator of your state of mind at the time you composed this piece. I think that you also showed how you viewed the descent.
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