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The Story Book





Such wonder and amusement
as they all sit down to hear
words of laughter and enjoyment
sitting quietly  to be near

As she tells of pretty faeries
and of goblins in the glen,
toadstool houses, (Mrs Mouse's)
and the Witch of Hollow End 

Toasted crumpets, dripping butter
keeping warm upon the hearth
sleepy children huddled safely
dreaming dreams of magic paths

So the rain continues falling
and the sky is getting dark
but for some folk who are drowsy,
Witches broomsticks in the park.......
~~~~~~




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Written May 27th, 2005

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  • Raining Kisses silver member
    December 29, 2008

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    wow, this is incredibly good, it has the cosy cuddle up feel that is the essential ingredient in all kids literature.
    Have you read Shirly Hughs books, your work has a very similar quality, this is truly special
    thanks for sharing


    • cutiepie gold member
      December 30, 2008
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      Many thanks for your kindness. I enjoy writing for children as it allows me a freedom one can only use when thinking as a child Glad you enjoyed it


  • Knight70 silver member
    October 26, 2007

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    such a beautiful childrens' poem....

    I'm sure that your grandchildren lit up when you read them this. What a gift it is for you to be able to share something so precious with them! God bless you, cutiepie!! Knight70


    • cutiepie gold member
      October 26, 2007
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      Thank you Sir Knight delighted that you enjoyed it


  • LittleAnn
    October 17, 2007

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    Oh how sweet!
    I really enjoyed reading this poem, you wrote it with great rhythm and rhyming!

    I love, love, love it!
    *bird* *bird* *bird*
    Annie


    • cutiepie gold member
      October 17, 2007
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      Thank you Anna I enjoy writing for children and this was for my grandchildren. They are so easy to please


  • cutiepie gold member
    November 15, 2006
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    Glad you enjoyed it I will repay the kindness after a good nights sleep


  • cutiepie gold member
    July 7, 2006
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    Glad you enjoyed it Many thanks


  • light to a dreamer gold member
    July 6, 2006
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    Liked this makes me go back to childhood storys very well writen

  • cutiepie gold member
    November 7, 2005
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    Thank you, yes some of the old traditions such as reading to children is sadly dying out, which is such a shame. All those wonderful fables are only brought to life when "mom or dad" whispers the words..To me, reading to children forms an invisible "bond". The special thing about it all is that those children then go on to have their own children and repeat the process. It stimulates the mind for children and also allows the adult a chance to re-visit their childhood, As a grandmother, I still enjoy the look on the little ones faces whilst reading "Goldilocks and the three bears"..their imaginations run riot, and the whole story takes on a whole new dimension. They see so much more than we do..perhaps over the years we loose the ability to use our imaginations. Sorry I am rambling Many thanks for your kind comments, they are greatly appreciated
    Edited on Nov 07, 4:48 p.m. because ''.

  • Virginia Logsdon
    November 7, 2005
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    I really enjoyed this!

    This poem brings back memories of having my mom read fairy tales to us when we were small and also of reading stories to my daughter when she was small.Gee, I still read to her alot untill she was in about 7th grade.{By then, she was a little too independant and had to read her own all of the time.} Well, I guess it seems to be a fading custom for some here in America to read nursery ryhmns and such-but it wasn't for me.I kept the tradition going well.I enjoyed reading them myself and I probably still will, when I find the time.{I still read Dr. Suess at times!}He brings out the child in all of us!
    Edited on Nov 07, 12:19 because ''.

  • cutiepie gold member
    June 1, 2005
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    Thank you for your lovely comments, I write these for my Grandchildren to read on wet and cold days Delighted that you enjoyed it

  • Moon Shadow
    June 1, 2005
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    Beautiful Poem

    Such a lovely poem,the readers are encouraged to use their imagination throughout the piece,it was a joy to read and I believe it deserves a place in a book of Poems for Children.Best Wishes Moon Shadow


  • macandrew
    June 1, 2005
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    very good

    Wonderful. It is good to imagine some kids now a days not totally locked into the tv or computer that they can still listen to a story.

    Beautifull written.
    thanks,
    John


  • cutiepie gold member
    May 28, 2005
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    Ah Jonny...Star Wars I love along with Battleship Galactia Glad you enjoyed

  • Fellow poet
    May 27, 2005
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    The kids sit to follow a tale in which they can instently realate. You are Yoda and I'm the sith lol for you write good usually and I write dark usually, Star wars had to say it, just dl it shh don't tell anyone.
    Nice write,
    Jonny


  • cutiepie gold member
    May 27, 2005
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    Aw... thanks


  • cutiepie gold member
    May 27, 2005
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    I am delighted that you enjoyed this. Many thanks for your kindness

  • Stella Shall
    May 27, 2005
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    Very clever and Quirky. love2u


  • cutiepie gold member
    May 27, 2005
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    Thank you

  • redlipstick
    May 27, 2005
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    wonderful

    Wonderful. Very cute. The rhyme and assonance here and there sounded brilliant. It is rare to find such pure and easily flowing pieces. Great.
    Emily


  • pixiedust13
    May 27, 2005
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    cute poem!!!!! reminds me of the fairy tales i read when i was younger. you drew a vivid picture in my mind of the things you said. keep it up!!


  • cutiepie gold member
    May 27, 2005
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    I shall have to go and get some tips from smoochie Thank you for pointing me in the right direction


  • cutiepie gold member
    May 27, 2005
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    Many thanks for your kindness


  • cutiepie gold member
    May 27, 2005
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    Thank you

  • cutiepie gold member
    May 27, 2005
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    I think we are all children at heart..Carolyn is probably paying you a compliment by saying that Glad you enjoyed this

  • cutiepie gold member
    May 27, 2005
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    Aw...thank you ..I think I shall have to write one about the huge pot of points I found under the rainbow Thank you my friend


  • CountryCousin
    May 27, 2005
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    Good book

    That is so cool and I sure think it is a great idea for you to do that. Smoochie Girl is good at writing these too.


  • Bellafreespirit
    May 27, 2005
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    Excellent i loved it, the imagery was superb and your rhming scheme was great. I especially loved these lines
    "Toasted crumpets, dripping butter
    keeping warm upon the hearth
    sleepy children huddled safely
    dreaming dreams of magic paths"
    very well written


  • cutiepie gold member
    May 27, 2005
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    Thank you One more for the collection for the Grandchildren Glad you enjoyed it


  • Sarah Elizabeth
    May 27, 2005
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    I loved this poem! It's so...fantasy-like. And fairytale-ish. And magical. Made me feel like a kid again! I LOVE THIS POEM!!


  • Deke
    May 27, 2005
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    Hi Lynne, you did wonderful on this one my friend. I guess that I am still a kid at heart--anyway that's what Carolyn tells me, and I have more or less begun to believe her.
    Deke


  • masterblaster gold member
    May 27, 2005
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    Hi, wonderful my friend, and look I have an applause left, miracles will never cease, this is so lovely , I must put this on my favorites, keep forgetting to do this, wonderful, hugs Di

  • cutiepie gold member
    May 27, 2005
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    I think that we need to hang onto the magic we learnt as a child.."Santa" and the "Tooth faerie".."Tinkerbell" etc. all add to our makeup as adults..it holds the magic for when we have children and grandchildren of our own Thank you for your kind comments, I appreciate then


  • CountryCousin
    May 27, 2005
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    Well done

    I love this too and you do have a real flair for this type of thing. Well done.

  • Art of Ignorance
    May 27, 2005
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    So the rain continues falling
    and the sky is getting dark

    I am totally LOVING that line!! I don't know why but I do. Very magical sigh Reminds me of the days when I was a little girl that believed in Santa (Not that I'm much different now )Very cool.


  • cutiepie gold member
    May 27, 2005
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    Thank you I enjoy writing for children..it brings out the child in me

  • VisionMuse
    May 27, 2005
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    I really liked this * It was magical=)

    Thanks for sharing.

    Leaf

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