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kill me

kill me please
kill me now
i want to die
i don't care how
kill me with a knife
or shoot my head
i want to die now
i want to be dead
slit my throat
make me say no more
then cut open my stomach
cut down to my core
pick up a gun
and aim at my head
shot me quick
and watch my blood spread
i don't care how you do it
just make sure i am dead

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please kill me
Written May 26th, 2005

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  • Academy
    July 26, 2005
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    (I applauded you)

  • Academy
    July 26, 2005
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    oops! Forgot to do this...


  • Academy
    July 26, 2005
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    hahaha! This is so funny! I mean, you make something very serious have a kind of jumpy, skipping feeling to it.
    I love it!
    "make me say no more" is a bit awkward in context...but what can you do, right?
    I like how you slip in a bit of rhyme, but don't make it too methodical (I think that is the right word...)

    0-0===Chubbs


  • morgana raven Greeters member
    July 26, 2005
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    wow this i sgreat please put the word star in your author comment just wat i askin ppl to do wen i really like poems so i can come bk to em lol
    laura


  • July 26, 2005
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    This was very interesting, i noticed alot of people want to die but dont have the will power to do it themselves. This was a very nice write and alot of people can relate to it. Good job.


  • Death by Murder
    July 25, 2005
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    I WANT TO DIE TOO NOW!!!


  • sleepingINblackRain
    July 21, 2005
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    wow this is great. expressing a longing for death from the pressure of life. great poem

    ~X~Taylor


  • July 6, 2005
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    i can relate more then i evr expected.......good poem


  • Shawnnessy
    June 22, 2005
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    wow that is fantastic.. although i dont want u to ever die. *pulls u close and u. ur the greatest grandbaby ever. i do however love the poem. the rhyming was great. makes me want to read it again

  • Rejected Romantic
    June 14, 2005
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    Nooo don't die *grabs you and hugs you tightly* This is very beautifully written. The rhythm was perfect. This poem is a burst of emotions....! Loved it!


  • Morodrin
    May 30, 2005
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    Very sad, very powerful.

    No one could kill some one with so much talent. Keep writing and try to see that life is what you make it. Any time you feel hurt or down, there's always something you can do (besiseds dying) to make things better.


  • beautifulbrat
    May 27, 2005
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    my dearest sis im not gonna kill u. no, no, no. but this is a great write. if ya need me just holla


  • Lactar Wolfgang
    May 26, 2005
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    sweetie i will not kill u. I like u. I do not know what is going on but whatever it is it can not be that bad. Great write I really felt your emotion and desperation.

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