Sauntering into my sanctuary
He knows nothing of personal belonging
His mother born him in a jewelry box
Oh, imagine her scream
When the black mother bit the woman's hand,
As she reached in for her favorite ring
Legs, a cliche of conventional horror
Eyes much of the same
Followed me from my bathroom
My hair smelled of fruit, possibly flowers
Water dripped down
Shivering, as it reached the small of my back
I was fresh, clean, beautiful for his kill
Towel drops, revealed wet skin
His heart raced, legs twitching
A burst of speed, though I cannot determine
How fast, he came upon me
For I did not realize the pitter-patter
Of his immense legs on the wooden floor,
Body a bouncing sphere of weight and apparent lust
Spider arms enveloped me, he licked his pincher lips
A welt on my throat,
The mating then began
Seemingly delicate hairs penetrated the flesh on my thighs
His spider legs spread mine
Ninth leg, the phallus
A mass of pulsating strength
Under him, I was for the taking
His body tore into me, ruthlessness not a question
Demand of sex too strong an influence
To consider my screams
He pounded into me
Until my innards, essential organs
Were reduced to forgotten lust
Author notes
AND: For your information, this doesn't have anything to do with SPIDERMAN, the action comicbook character. Think:
The Cure - Lullaby ♥
Written May 26th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- I want scary. scare me to death by Forgotten Renegade8.
300 points, ended May 9, 2006, 3 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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hehe, this is very interesting.
I love the words you used, the description and imagery. I have always thought of spiders as deadly females but in this case you made him a guy and turned it into a rape poem, congrats on creativity to you!
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Very unique. No idea where people got spider man from but okay! Anyways, this was very interesting to read. Draws you in, dont you think? Great work. And keep it up! Goodluck in the contest =)
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Very creepy and chilling tale. My skin is still crawling from your excellent imagery and dscriptions. I've never read a spider poem woven with erotica. Very interesting style. Great job. This is exactly what I as lookng for.
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lol doesn't sound like Spider-Man.
Yes, erotica is fine. And I really like this piece. When I first started reading it, I got the impression it would be from a spider's point of view. lol But regardless, it's a very good write and it's also descriptive. And I love that in a poem. Good job and good luck in the contest!
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great write! intresting spin on arachnaphobia lol. your imagery was good and i liked how you made it into a story. always keep writing *kat~~~
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The imagination is really good and this kind of erotica creates some kind of interest. Hope you have seen some sci-fiction before composing this poem. Your poem has got the right rhythm which has demonstrated the horror of the situation.
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vivid
wow... this was great... i very much liked it. my favorite two lines were
"Demand of sex too strong an influence
To consider my screams"
it didn't really give me shivers, because spider's don't frighten me, but i'm quite sure that if i were afraid of them, i'd be shaking...
keep up the excelent work. you truly have talent!
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YEs, Arachnaphobia is a scar thing.. Great Piece! (Spiderman rocks!, heh.) I loved this, wtie on. Penny lane is a cool character from Almost Famous... okay, ill stop talking now...great piece ~DK
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Well, after reading the entry rules for this contest I must say this made more sence. This could easily be creepiest thing I have read in a while. Good on you, it takes quite a bit to give me the chills, the bad kind that is, and you certainly managed it.
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A hot write.
This is indeed erotica about a Spiderman and I bet they never filmed this one.
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