Let me walk in the awe of a sunset
Let the wind wing through my heart
Let the stones become pebbles to earn
Let them become the wisdom I gain
Let me become one with the universe
Let the horizons be the template that
Defines what I might be… let me be
As the flow of the river unseen carving
Gently all that becomes a part of my verse
Let humility become my crown
Let childlike wonder become my thunder
Let the four winds aspirate become my gate
Let peace and wisdom be the wand in me
Let me tolerate the flaws in reality
Let me remember it is not age that defines
The depth of the river… it is how the
River flows that defines
~ ~
Author notes
~Credo~ This is a prewrite I do hope you enjoy
Commented on "The House The Key" it was awesome by Ilitilian
Written January 20th, 2004
A contest entry
- Inspiration please! anything goes! by woman onamision.
650 points, ended February 25, 2006, 59 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
1 - 99 of 99
-
A lovely prayer to the One who listens to our sincereity and our ernest aspirations. God bless you. All that you have wished for is attainable through that divine Grace.
I wish you the very best. This was a truly inspired write.
Love Tara
-
With sincere appreciation and gratitude!!
Hello E A Collins thank you for taking the time to stop by and share your warm comments and querry And enthustiastic generous applause Poetry to (me) becomes the the "message" applied with factors that I believe (to me) that are important ... the music in the words... the wisdom therein... excision of soul (truth of self) form and meter are quite important to others (not to me) basically I would say a poem is like giving birth ... it becomes your child your creation perfect or imperfect... unique to each self as they/you/I would take the time to nurture and create
Wishing you a glorious day
-
With sincere appreciation and gratitude!
Hello Victory Gin thank you for taking time to stop by and share your warm insightful comments Infinity is a wonderous thought ... magical or mathematical or perhaps a wisdom yet, born
Wishing you a glorious day! -
Nice write
Nice flow and good , solid imagery. Whuy did you choose to change the pattern of the 2nd verse and the 4th verse, and make these two different from eachother as well?Not that it lessened the poem, but it did break the flow a small bit. -
With sincere appreciation and gratitude!!
Hello luckynsincere thank you so much for taking the time to stop by and share your warm, insightful comments I am delighted you enjoyed your visit Thank you for your enthustiastic, generous applause It seems when we find our balance within we can let the muse flow... out and ever onward
Wising you much success in all of your endeavors
-
With sincere appreciation and gratitude!!
Hello sweetanjil thank you for taking the time to stop by and share your warm comments on my credo I'm delighted you enjoyed your visit
Wishing you a glorious day/night
-
Very philosophical here. I truly enjoyed this write. you have such a way with your words , they flow together nicely. I have not found A poem of yours I did not like. Please keep writing for you are a true poet. thank you for sharing this beautiful piece with me. Good luck to you dear friend. And keep it flowin from heart and soul to pen and paper.
-
Your poems never cease to amaze me. Your creativity once again prevails... I honestly enjoyed the flow of this poem. Great job! Best wishes!
Melanie
-
With sincere appreciation and gratitude!!
Indeed!! Thank you for stopping by and sharing your warm, insightful comments and your most generous, enthustiastic applause .... So much in the cosmos to take us to the winds... and wing...
-
Very philosophical, Mystical... a pure existence at one with nature and the cosmos, in preparation for (or getting away from)... that messy world of love! lol
-
With sincere appreciation and gratitude!!
Hello dead poet83 thank you for taking the time to stop by and share your warm comments Yes indeed code/goals
Wishing you much success in all of your endeavors
-
Hello meNtALLyill thank you for stoping by I'm sorry I did not get to respond until now somehow your comments have not shown up until today... strange things go on I guess
Have a wonderful day
-
I give it a 7.8
a beautiful anthem of sorts! very cool write. -
wow i love the backround. its beautiful like your poem. i love this! good luck in the contest!
~Brittany~ -
With my sincere appreciation and gratitude!!
Hello Derena thank you so much for taking the time to stop by and share your warm comments And your most generous applause I'm delighted you enjoyed your visit Indeed thoughts and goals to try to strive and become whole
Wishing you much success in all of your endeavors and a joyous, prosperous New Year to you and yours
-
With my sincere appreciation and gratitude!!
Hello Dear friend, I'm delighted you enjoyed your visit Yes, Aspirations yet, often I fall short... indeed We can but try Thank you so much for your wonderful, generous applause
Hugs
Love, Peace, Joy, Blessings, Wisdom,
Myst~ -
Wise words, a piece of art to be read when hearts become down
from troubles and worries, for one who cannot see the light, are finding it slowly within...Love this dear poet..
Thankyou so much for sharing this..A eye shall be forever opend..
Derena -
Hi, a very lovely write, it seeps into one heart, gently ,not intruding but teaching us , so many have those dreams, tobe like this write, this was so beautiful my friend, hope I have an applause left as points very few, great, all the best hugs, Di
-
ah ohkay- a student of socrates i see! sokay.
but ya know...it is true. if you think about time and the vastness of it in the midst of our tiny span of life it is rather mindboggling.
ah, i'm glad you though my words kind. I rather dislike it when i have honestly nothing nice to say. -
With sincere appreciation and gratitude!!
Thank you llitlian for taking the time and sharing your warm, insightful comments... in the end we become the smallest grain and the wind in all things So goes my belief... Have a glorious weekend
-
ah- me likes this one!
veyr very pretty! and i likes your background.
only thing i don't agree on is you creation worshiping sorta philosophy..but that's me and my believes. -
With sincere appreciation and gratitude for a
Thank you Rosey for your welcome words, your time you share and give for your insightful comments and generous applause You cannot go!! Love, Peace, Joy, Blessings, Wisdom ... Your friend, Always
-
With sincere appreciation and gratitude!!
Thank you Sweet poetrist for taking the time to stop by and share your warm, enthustiastic comments all so greatly appreciated Wishing you and yours a joyous Holiday Season 
-
This is a breath taking, beautiful poem. I am amazed at the word choices and the detail of this poem. Very good.
-
With sincere appreciation and gratitude!!
Thank you darell for taking the time to stop by and share your warm, generous comments all so greatly appreciated Wishing you and yours a joyous Holiday Season
-
Enchanting
This was a beautifully expressed wish.
I felt sincerity and passion in every line.
May your aspirations to be this wonder human being be realized.
A very tender and loving write. Enchanting! Excellent work.
Peace and blessings to you
Edited on Dec 07, 4:56 p.m. because ''. -
With sincere appreciation and gratitude!
Hello sycho warrior I'm delighted you enjoyed your visit here; thank you so much for taking the time to stop by and share your comments
-
Thank you bloody angel for taking the time to stop by and share your warm, generous comments Wishing you a Joyous Holiday Season
-
I enjoyed reading this. It is a really good poem, which really made me think. I'm glad I got to read it. Good luck for the contest
-
WWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWOWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW!!
!!!!!!! A brilliant poem!
There was a very good choice of words here. The description was amazing. It was really superb. It was fun to read. You can really write well. This was a reeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeaaaaaaallllllllllllllllllllllllyyyyyyyyyyyyy Lovely poem. It flows very well. I really had fun reading it. Kudos, my friend. You should consider getting published.
The poem was extremely thought provoking. I really found it a masterpiece. This is one of the better poems I have seen in recent times.
Keep writing. You are a good poet. You have a very good style, and you are a powerful writer. God bless you.
~Komal -
With sincere appreciation and gratitude!!
Thank you grannyeri for taking the time to stop by and share your warm, generous comments I'm delighted you have returned and enjoyed your visit again Stop by anytime
-
Loved the final statement - such a profound thought. Well written and great background. Have been here before, but like this still.
-
With Sincere appreciation and gratitude!!
Thank you grannyeri for taking the time to come here and share your warm comments all so very greatly appreciated. The backgrounds are courtesy of Almighty Aphrodite I was able to access them when I was a Silver Member finances dictate otherwise now... I do miss putting the beautiful backgrounds on... I'm delighted you enjoyed your visit
-
What a wonderful background for this great poem. Some wonderful aspirations to wish for, to strive and hope to achieve. A very profound final statement that says so much. Well written,
-
With sincere appreciation and gratitude!!
Thank you KitKatKatie05 for taking the time to stop by and give your warm comments! -
Beautifully Touching and Emotion
Nice Write
And Good luck! -
With sincere appreciation and gratitude!!
Thank you daedal Labyrinth for your wonderful insights all so greatly appreciated and your enthustiastic applause!! -
With sincere appreciation and gratitude
Thank you Molly for your warmth and enthusiasm all so greatly appreciated
-
what a magnificent list of aspirations! thank you for sharing and for writing with such clarity and crispness! wish you the best in the contest.
-
I loved this, so wonderfully written and the images that came to mind while reading it was wonderful. Great job on this wonderful write. Your talent shows in this. thank you for sharing.
-
with sincere appreciation and gratitude!
Thank you theothersideofme for taking the time to drop by and share your comments and time
-
With my sincerest gratitude and appreciation!
My humble thanks buffytheparrotlaye for your warmth, and enthustiastic generousity yes, when we fall into the wonders of nature we become whole in her oblivion
-
With sincere appreciation and gratitude!
Thank you cherche-d-ame for your warm comments when we have goals and stride positive we even as we stumble become a forward movement our essence is a flow thank you again for stopping by
-
Very sweet, touching. I like this. Great.
-
Ethereal!
Very beautifully written with a spiritual acceptance of life with all its flaws.Loved the way you talked of the river flowing on and you surrendering yourself to the universe and the stars.A true child of nature and well expressed! -
This is a powerful write of what one wishes to be at all times . I just wonder if any of us are capable of being all of this at all times , for it is in human nature to fail now and then. Never the less , what a motto to live by and to strive to come close to all of these aspirations My very best wishes in this contest
-
My sincere gratitude for your warm, enthustiastic comments all taken to heart
-
This is the true meaning of aspirations right here, vivid thoughts and universal themes help support the meaning and structure of this poem. Powerful stanza and simple flow give this poem the validity it deserves. Great job.
-
With sincere appreciation and gratitude!!
Thank you Watuwant for taking the time to stop in and bring your warm insightful comments... I believe when we are at peace we are blanced, productive and make positive strides and this energy touches others we are near when they to are affirmed in their own balance and peace this is then regenerated again...
-
-Credo-
Your authors comments explain it all. This too is my credo, or the one that I strive for. You've pretty much captured the essence of peace, desiring peace, finding peace, and being peace. It all comes from within, as we see out defining the reality we see.
peace
doug
-
With sincere appreciation and gratitude!!
Thank you so much lost soul for your warmth, kind words and enthustiastic applase all so greatly appreciated!! -
excellent
What a wonderful piece of poetry, this is something i can read everyday because it truly touches the heart.
"Let humility become my crown
Let childlike wonder become my thunder
Let the four winds aspirate become my gate
Let peace and wisdom be the wand in me
Let me tolerate the flaws in reality"
excellent, just excellent
-
With sincere appreciation and gratitude!!
Thank you so much Amunet Wolfbane you have made my night Your warmth and enthusiasm are so very welcome
-
Equistite piece! There are no other words to describe this. Don't touch it! It's perfect. Blessings, Gypsy
-
As always with sincere appreciation and grati
Hello Dear Friend... O' Almighty one I always look forward to your poetic, warm insightful comments Of course please feel free to have this engraved to a plaque and when you are up to it please write one of your own and send it to me so that I can have it carved also and then you will have two... as well as myself it is so beautiful for me to see the inspirational words of others as well as to feel the warmth in others when I have touched them... we are all flowers in the garden of life ... sometimes not enough too much sun, water, tendering, we become swatches... unknown dimensions of self it is then we fall to the shade, seek the sun, to overcome the needs within Many blessings my friend
-
This is a beautiful affirmation and credo...can I take this and have it engraved on a plaque and hung on my wall? I think that by opening up our hearts and allowing it to absorb all of the beauty and graciousness that life has to offer. Unfortunately, I haven't done that much lately, but then again at this point in time, I really don't have any incentive of my own to do so. So, this is why I'd like to borrow yours. This is beautifully written and inspires hope within even the most despondent of people.
Many blessings,
Raven Aurora
-
With sincere appreciation and gratitude!
Thank you myrataal for your warmth and enthusiasm all so greatly appreciated... wouldn't it be a beautiful world if we could touch others and each unleash the beauty in others by our words and deeds
-
Divine
Dearest Poetess
What an outstanding credo -- timeless and pure. I enjoyed reading your aspirations and whispers: it touched my being. I was listening to "Spirit of Ecstasy" when reading your poem ... and I thought: How appropriate! Powerful yet nuanced.
Myra -
With sincere appreciation and gratitude!!
Thank you Rambler for your kind insightful thoughts all are so greatly appreciated
-
The final three lines are worth the admission price. I feel sorry for anyone who never discovers that flow..
-
With sincere appreciation and gratitude!!
Thank you Providence for your warmth, kind words and your enthusiasm I'm delighted that this piece touched you so
-
Marvelous
Captivating work. You hooked me with the first stanze and then..."Let me remember it is not age that defines
The depth of the river… it is how the
River flows that defines" Oh you washed me away! This is marvelous work
-
With sincere appreciation and gratitude!
Thank you so much dying musician for taking the time to stop by and comment all so greatly appreciated
-
the desires of all who can see into their being. this is a wonderful peice, and im sorry but i simply cannot critique it. nice job
-
With sincere appreciation and gratitude!
Thank you bleu heart (Tricia) for taking the time to read and comment... yes, in our humility we are aware of the vast sphere of all that breathes, abounds, enlightens... what joy when the shades of all spheres we become one
-
With sincere appreciation and gratitude!!
Thank you QueenofRewengie for taking the time to stop by and for your thoughtful insightful comments... yes, this is a reminder to me what I need to strive for on a daily basis... many times I fall short... but I do try
-
With sincere appreciation and gratitude!
Thank you Miji for taking the time to stop by and comment all so greatly appreciated
-
Overwhelmingly rife with soft images of a goo
If we had awards for graphics this is definitely a winner suits the mood of your poem, I really like it. Oh yeah we're not supposed to say that, Let's see i found it not only philosophical but truly thought provoking in that facing a ripe middle age or just looking back on one's life you hope you have lived with the gentility spoken of here and will be remebered for such times when you could have been a real nasty person and weren't. -
(: How beautiful. All of the comparisons and symbolism. I can't really say much of anything else, but that it was great.
-
Many Blessings... Myst XOXOXO
Wonderful let the river of inspiration flow for such a worthy cause for all who take the raft..
-
With sincere appreciation and gratitude XOXOX
Thank you Queen of DE-Nile for your warmth, encouragement and all so greatly appreciated... if my work can generate inspiration in others enabling the positive creative flow then think what a beautiful world this would be if we could all so inspire others Please let me know how I can help with your project for such a wonderful worthy cause
-
With sincere appreciation and gratitude!
Thank you evangel for your warmth, encouragement and welcome enthusiasm
-
With sincere appreciation and gratitude!
I'm delighted the words of my Credo have inspired you when we can touch the oasis of another we allow the beauty of the river within to flow and again regenerate more beauty to the world
-
Beautiful. I can tell I'm not the only one that loves your work. You are honestly such a talented poet, keep writing or else...da dun da dun
-
Wow, this poem just sends out inspiration. You did an amazing job on this. The flow was brilliant and you had interesting word choices. Great job.
-
With Sincere appreciation and gratitude!!
Thank you so much transcendental baby for your warmth and enthusiasm I'm delighted that you were inspired
-
With sincere appreciation and gratitude!!
Thank you so much MissConceited for your warm words and enthusiasm all so greatly appreciated
-
With sincere appreciation and gratitude!!
Thank you so much Torn Chakra for stopping by and taking the time to read and comment I'm delighted that the words touched you
-
Stunning
Wow... What can I say? It's an absolutely stunning poem! You have such excellent talent! Good job on this work of art! -
That is lovely. I felt inspired by the last lines ... Thank you
-
I really liked this; very mystical indeed. It was like you took me through this and I went through everything as well. Great job. I loved it! Very vivid details and such a lovely picture to go with it. Great job!
Hugs
Jess -
With sincere appreciation and gratitude!
Thank you Dreamweavr for your wonderfully woven comments truly inspirational your warmth and enthusiasm are so greatly appreciated
-
MYSTICAL
A beautiful mystical piece ... worthy of your name ....
Soft and gentle like an out of season fall of snow that dances teasingly before your eyes.
Thank you for sharing,
Sammy -
With sincere appreciation and gratitude!
Thank you raspberry for taking the time to stop by read and comment all so very much appreciated
-
With sincere appreciation and gratitude!
Thank you jonesz12 for your gracious comments and taking the time to stop by and read all are so very welcome
-
With sincere appreciation and gratitude!!
Thank you Providence for your warm kind comments and for taking the time to stop by and read
-
Another cool piece..
-
nice
I like this. Very real with all the imperatives, let me...
That's how it is though sometimes, so little control, we just have ask, let me... and hopefully it gets taken care of. Good use of the river metaphor. I've seen it used in numerous cases and this one worked better than most. Keep up the good work. -
Thank you
"Let the horizons be the template that
Defines what I might be"
Beautiful read. Stunning images. It took me to a very peace-filled place. Thank you -
With sincere appreciation and gratitude!
Thank you Dave such an honor you have bestowed to me I am truly humbled... May the wind wing through your soul ... let the horizon be a journey of your wonders
-
With sincere appreciation and gratitude!!
Thank you so much XXdeadsoulxx you are very insightful and remember when you are completly at peace (mediditation helps) all of these things are possible Thank you again for stopping by and your warm comments all so greatly appreciated
-
aspirations is such a cool word. very seductive title! this was such an original peace. i really loved it. i'm gonna go put this on the favorites cus ur my hero
-
First of all, The background is amazing! The poem itself is amazing. The idea was a great one! The lines:
'Let me walk in the awe of a sunset
Let the wind wing through my heart
Let the stones become pebbles to earn
Let them become the wisdom I gain'
I would love it if this would happen..one because the sunset is so awsome and the wind is so great..I just love nature anyway..
All I can say is beautiful poem...captured everything wnated to be said.. Thanks for writing such a great peice of art.
Samantha
-
With sincere appreciation and gratitude!
Thank you KIndredDreamer for taking the time to read and leave your warm comments All so greatly appreciated
-
it's a wonderful poem!
-
With sincere appreciation and gratitude!
Thank you so much Pyrosama for taking the time to read and your kind remarks are so greatly appreciated
-
this was quite a unique idea for a poem. This was quite an elegant poem and I thought altogether you did an amazing job.
-
With sincere appreciation and gratitude
Thank you so much Jaded Eloquence for stopping by and your warm comments all so greatly appreciated
-
Good
I really do like the idea of this poem. Excellent work!
Adding your comment:
1 - 99 of 99
22 old applause
