Bird Table (Nature) Haiku
Icy lacy net
blankets Holly bush and tree
graces berry feast.
Sky Art (Colour) Haiku
Crimson wisps blood-stain
azure's fading sky to paint
war in sunset's art.
Tall Order (Animal) Haiku
Legs all sprawled askew.
Yards of neck enmeshed in thorn.
Delicate giraffe.
Despair (Emotion) Senryu
Anguish, held too long.
Wracking sobs gulp flowing tears.
Eyes implore. Arms fall.
Today (Open Choice) Senryu
Baby born today.
Text said: "Girl, black hair. All well!
Battery light blinks.
Author notes
Written May 26th, 2005
A contest entry
- Haiku Series by silverscent.
300 points, ended June 5, 2005, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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these shouldnt be together. each should be read singly and savoured, the wordings are just too good. I had to read each a few times to really take absorb them, I think I like them all each in its way is perfect. Its good to see you back, I have missed you.
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beautiful
Very nice pieces you have here. I myself find it quite difficult to write traditional haikus, but these are all lovely. Your descriptions are beautiful and your titles all relate clearly to the theme of each piece. I particularly enjoyed the third and last one. Great job!
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i admire them all but "tall order" was my favorite
it held a bit of whimsy-ish-ness for me.
i really should try haiku... seems the only time i remember i'd like to try it is when i read some fine ones such as these
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Well done. Those little things are hard to write, and even harder to make effective. You've done quite well. The one about the giraffe was priceless.
Cheers,
Yossarian -
I don't know if you remember me...it has been so long. I did not know you were back to writing. You will go back onto my fav list...thought you had left the site.
This is a lovely string of haiku and the images and emotions are vivid. Glad to see you are back.
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they are all simply beautiful and completely breath taking. it is good to see you writing again my sister. I have not known your wherea bout for some time now. This is Onyx Fire tear
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A nice set of Haiku and Senyru. I noticed you follow the more traditional variation of the form of 5-7-5. I prefer less than 17 syllables myself, because I have found the ones 17 syllables tend to be alittle too wordy.
My favorite here was the second one.
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