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The Train Haiku

train train train train train
train  train train train train train train
train train train train train

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Written May 26th, 2005

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  • PoeticPixie77
    May 27, 2005
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    Well, you kept with the proper syllables... It made me giggle too because I wasn't quite expecting just the word train over and over. Good write.

  • bassclarinetbuddy92
    May 27, 2005
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    good

    Erm, Adam, good, but I can't say much about the vocabulary. At least you followed the syllable pattern. Very original, made me laugh. Please forgive me if I have wronged you in the past by a comment. Didn't mean to, that wasn't nice of me.


  • May 26, 2005
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    ok

    well...what can i say...it was actually a 5 7 5 haiku...although you didnt use a very large vocabulary you didn;t mispell any words...good job and keep at it

  • Sky Prince Ireland gold member
    May 26, 2005
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    QUITE GOOD

    Very simple and original.
    A pure validation of your love for trains, hehe.
    Nice one!

    Brian


  • Anna Emkah
    May 26, 2005
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    Very original indeed. hahahaha. Well at least you have tried.

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