"Oh wow, look at that hair"
Yeah yeah whatever
"Oh my gosh, look at what she wears"
Oh right, just all join together.
Talk and talk whatever you like
Because you won't see me put up a fight
For I don't care, what you say
About my hair or what I wear
For goodness sake-
At least I'm not fake.
You all care about your wonderful looks
Time I'd rather spend reading a book
She wears glasses...so is she a nerd?
That's so stupid, so absurd
You'll waste your life, wondering what others think
And because of that - like a rock, you'll sink.
At least, I have a real soul
This is me, get it through your skull.
Author notes
Oh, well..once again I was bored and yeah people are weird always caring about others looks so yeah.
Written May 25th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Gone and Done With.....You. by Nostalgia.
550 points, ended September 7, 2007, 16 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - **[[EPIPHANY ABOUT LOVE]]** by punksense.
400 points, ended March 8, 2008, 16 entries
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What did you think
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this is good! ^^ i like it!!! its true of what gurls like that think... ive been picked on for that for years and years... but im use to it.
anywho, its awesome! XD
Care XD <3
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The rhyming was a bit forced, but it worked in some places. I wish you had talked more about your soul, because that's what you wrote that you liked about yourself, no? The last two lines of the 2nd to last stanza really made me laugh, "You'll waste your life, wondering what others think / And because of that - like a rock, you'll sink." :-P
It's great that you can keep on doing what you do despite the comments.
Good luck!
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Good Work!
Always take the higher ground. I like who I am even if nobody else does and I'm not on this earth to be someone else... that's someone else's job. I'm really impressed by this poem and it's obvious that you aren't fake and that you have a tremendous soul and heart. Be blessed, my friend!
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I really like this and it is so true! I love the way you've communicated this, Fab
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I like it. All those fakes can go F*ck off.
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Yeah just a little emotion oozed out in this one, lol. I think it works really well and explains your emotions nicely.
~NineTailedFox -
Another great write, I love poetry that screams truth. You have a nice style about your writing, and you chose relatable subjects that sometimes get me all fired up, lol. NICE.
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sweet!...i like it...i laugh at people when they do that in school...and then i see the people that are made fun of and go tell them that they look good =]...im a nice person like that...and then i get friends and we make fun of them...lol =] well yea...nice poem =]
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Amazing!
It's funny I was just thinking the same thing the other day... everyone judges everyone else by outward appearances, never looking far enough into the soul. So what if your not a "barbie" I'm not one either and I'm proud to say that. lol Great write and I'm glad that you don't feed into all the opinions others have of you. Life isn't about molding yourself into what others want to see, it's about being happy and being the person you want to be.
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Love it... that just hits the spot on all the people who do care about this crap.
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Invisible Claps For J00!!!!!
Well done my sister!!!
I realy liked this one!
LOOKY you won a shiny trophy!!!!
Congrats!!!!
You should have entered this in that contest we had in fifth! -
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I love it! its so true and its really what all people need to realize but very few do it really pinpoints things and puts them into perspective i love it -
OMG!!! I LOVE THIS ONE!!!!
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Lol! A real and profond person, finally! A person with a head on their shoulders! Powerful and truthful, thanks for entering!
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This is a strong and powerful complaint that you have written against the urge for people to judge each other on looks. What's wrong with being yourself and acting like it, huh?
This is a good rant and I enjoyed reading this.
Keep it up, and more important, keep on being who you are
Leander -
I read the piece inspired by this work written by Sunset Angel. I see why she was inspired - it says basically the same thing except you involve something that she doesn't. And I like that. SOUL. There are some people with soul and some who just don't have a clue and if they ever get it, it comes much later in life, frequently after some tragedy or something. I haven't checked but it seems the two of your are rather young. Knowing oneself is one of the keys to not only being sucessful but happiness in life. In the line fourth from the bottom, I think the word "like" should be "life" unless I'm missing somehting. Enjoyed this a lot. Many safe returns...
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Aw yeah, thanks everyone who commented..nice to see people like the stuff I write.
Yeah I know I'm not too good with ryhmes..but I still can't help trying to make them XD lol..so yeah..
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Oh. My. Friken. God. WOW! I love this peom! I love your honestly. lol, sucks that people like that will always be around...
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great work ... wonderfully worded .. one might hope all in this world can feel the message
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Great write. So true. Keep thinking that way and read and write on. I LOVE Nerdsville and plan on staying there for a long time.
ON a poetic note, the flow was a little staggered, should be a little more smooth. I'd work on the meter. Also some of the rhyme is forced but don't do to much to it, if you do anything. Because you don't want change it too much.
All in all I applaud your message. You GO girl!
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well said, you are who you are, and if no-one likes it who cares huh! great read, keep on writing. 
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awesome job!
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WOW really great job...doesnt it bug you when people are just all material orriented? grr haha well anyways i think you got through your emotion really well on this piece and i definitely look forward to reading more from you in the future...best wishes to you and yours
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that was a good write. it spoke to me i know what its like to to be treated differently and made fun of because of my life style. keep writing you are really good.
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be true to you, fuck the rest of the world.
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