Reaping fall's gold rush
silver shovels piling leaves
smelting bronze with fire.
Author notes
I love the way the gold autumn colours are complimented by the reds of the fires that burn the leaves.
I commented on: Burning Souls.
Written May 25th, 2005
A contest entry
- Haiku!!! by .
300 points, ended June 7, 2005, 29 entries
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I like your references to all the colours and different metals; and the image of gathering the leaves and burning them is left to us to interpret.
I've been told to leave out the capital letters, to read it all as one sentence.
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wow...i am stunned. i have never read a haiku like this...i am not sure if i love it or just sort of like it and am amazed to see a write like this...let me get back to you on this...good luck -
this is lovely! you do a fantastic job with imagery. i love the idea of fall colors mixed with gold and silver. oyur language is stunning too - "smelting" - what a wonderful word! good luck with this in the contest!
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Very good job on a haiku. You've got the concept down pat. Keep practicing writing them and you'll get better. Good luck!
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This is definitely a gorgeous haiku painting the image of a picturesque autumn.-Curtis Meyer
PS Please read any/all poetry posted on thiste site by k-dense (myself) -
you know something Fire is tough to figure the syllabels, never thought how tough this word is-sounds almost like 2 but it's 1
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i've never really studied the haiku, though i've read a number of them. and this one is as good as any i've ever read
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I didn't notice you wrote this one too, honestly, this one is even better, good luck, you've got quite the imagination.
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