A couple sits by a window
They share the paper
And discuss headlines,
Over fair trade coffee.
A tiny hallway leads to
Carmichael's Bookstore
I sit in the coffee shop
Heine Bros.
Where you can hear
Al Green and the Beach Boys,
And a man in a Slayer shirt
Can talk friendly with
A Mountain Woman
With long gray hair,
And she can talk to herself
Without seeming crazy,
Only happy.
And I can be alone,
But not feel lonely.
Author notes
Written May 23rd, 2005
A contest entry
- Java java java java by TrulyAnAngel.
300 points, ended June 1, 2005, 2 entries
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Very upbeat, I like it a lot. This is what coffee shops are for isn't it? Maybe coffee affects the parts of your brain that control people watching, makes them go into overdrive.
Or maybe I'm just talking nonsense.
Anyway, very good. The standard for this contest is very groovy.
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lol that is good. i wish that more coffe shops were like that. it would be magical. and perfect
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magical....i felt like i was at the corner table sipping on a cup and watching the folks too this is a pleasant feel to the poem, like gentle summer late-afternoon sun
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alone but lonely......is good
I really love this one of yours. I myself love to write in this style
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good job
This is why I love my hometown too, it's simple, and pleasant, atleast that's what I imagined you were getting at here. It's home, and it just seems like you were destined to be there, anyways, good job here, good luck in your competition writes, lata tata -
it wasn't meant to sound sad, it was actually a kind of... enlightening moment for me
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Nice write. Sounds like you enjoy watching people.Kinda sad too.
Hope you feel better.I like the free trade coffee remark the best.~~~Suseann -
this is good... i wish i was there too... xoxo stac
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