Liquid eyes as dewdrops
on pinkening petal-cheeks
lips suffused, smolder with promises ;
intoxicating fragrances
permeate sepal, buds, corolla
of this exquisite Celtic bloom
The sanguine Spanish sun,
accustomed ever to smile upon
a well-stocked rosebed of it's own
reflects the radiant glory of an Irish rose
nurtured by it's balmy bounty
and has the grace to blush.
Author notes
FORE-PLAY - Option 7, Rose Petals
L I L T A N D R H Y M E
I am from Ireland, and this was written to my wife, whose beauty flourished and was burnished exotic in the warm and splendid Spanish sun - the fiery beauty of Spain, in its turn, was enhanced by her presence.
Sometimes you need to transplant a rose to a sunnier place to realise how very beautiful it is.
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A contest entry
- The Meaning of Love by Dusk.
360 points, ended February 24, 2006, 17 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Comments
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awe such a beautiful write.
beautiful imagery,
thank you for entering,
best of luck. -
Dear Poet,
Thank you for entering my contest: "Fore-play".
Please place your user name in AN'S as requested in the rules with spaces in between the letters. Once you've complied im.
Congratulations on all the trophies.
Wishing you the best
till then
stay
liquid -
What a beautiful piece for your wife.
Sheila
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Quite a beautiful and thoughtful dedication. Very goo read here. I'm kinda speechless. Well done. Thanks for the entry!
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wow.. this was amazing! the imagery in this piece was phenomenal. the person this is dedicated to must be someone special.
an excellent write. keep up the good work! thanks for entering and good luck in my contest!
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Very emotional and full of beautiful imagery. The flow of this piece was very good, and the way you worked the imagery into it worked wonderfully.
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Lovely sentiment to say about your wife, a beautiful vision. Blessings.
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thankyou sooooo much for entering!
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Beautifully Romantic!!
Wishing you all the best!! Peace, Cyn 
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This is a really lovely write. Your love for this person really shines through your words and adds a glorious touch to the poem. I especially love the last line: "and has the grace to blush." So very sweet and tender.
Thanks for entering the contest
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Thank you for your beautifully worded entry, good luck in my contest, Josie
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Oh my
I see you've entered this in a lot of contests
Great poem though, I loved it. And I agree with what you said in your author's comments, about the rose being transplanted. Excellent work.
Good luck in the contest
best wishes as always
Autumn Whisper
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aaww
I love the meaning behind your poem. The feelings are sweet and the imagery was very good.
It is nice to know someone of a different culture and they way you describe how beauty gets realized is very nice too. congrats on the trophies and good luck in the contest!!
transit~
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Stunning in many many ways Well done a joy to read
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This was such a lovely piece. The affection was clear to see and I especially liked the lines "reflects the radiant glory of an Irish rose, nurtured by it's balmy bounty" such a lovley way of talking about the one you love. This was very beautiful x
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thats sweet to write such a lovely poem about your wife, beautiful piece, thanks for entering
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beautiful, beautiful.
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simply beautiful. I love this. your words are sweet, beautiful and honest. the metaphors are rich and the imagery is stunning.
very impressive work here
-checkmate
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Very beautiful, great descriptions! Thank you for entering my contest!! I love the imagery!
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i like the descriptions in this one, it had vivid imagrey! beautiful write, pretty passionate! keep penning, and thanks for the entry, wishing you the best of luck!
~beauty of silence
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aww the day som eguy writes a poem for me is the day i stop breathing for 3min. this was so pretty. what a lovely write
and good luck in the contest -
Such lovely and loving poetry...I envy the Mrs.
Thanks for sharing -
This poem has an almost intoxicating, passionate and romantic feel of love within the depths of the words, which is brought to life by the use of excellent imagery, both of the lady and of the flowers under a warm Spanish sun. It’s sprinkled lightly with alliteration, which adds interest to certain points within the poem.
The first stanza is very descriptive of various facial features of the lady and I found the impact of the line “lips suffused, smolder with promises;” particularly expressive. Imagining the intoxicating fragrances is easy for any reader who has experienced flowers sweet perfumes being enhanced by the sun’s heat. Sweet-peas and wallflowers came into my mind as they are wonderful scents in the warmth.
“The sanguine Spanish sun” starts off stanza two in a very positive manner, and I’m sure many would agree that Spain has a well stocked bed of it’s own for it to smile upon, but I think it is lovely the way the author has taken his Irish Rose into a foreign environment and found its real beauty once more. That’s so very romantic. I think the last line is wonderful because it shows how ‘the rose’ responds.
Thank you for entering the Raven Contest 2007 and good luck with your entry! Your work may also be viewed by other Raven judges.
Northern Raven
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Beatuiful, and very descriptive. I like the imagery you used to express yourself. Well done. Good luck in the contest. Take care.
Tali -
Thanks
Thank you for your entry. I will be back after the contest to comment more.
Tali
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So wonderfully penned! Your wife is so lucky to be seen this way through your eyes! true beauty is shown through you lovly words!! excellent write! thanks for entering! xxx
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This Is Really Good...
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this is really beautiful lucky wife to be the receiver of such a lovely piece very well done to you so beautiful
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OMG
this poem is sooo cute...I love it... you are a very talented writer!!!
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This is a well written, well worded peice in which imaginery, adjectives and noun aim in one direction. I can't find any word out of place. The simile with the rose works very well as both the reading ans the metaphorical level, so there's little to add.
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Beautiful. Your wife must be quite proud of being described like this!
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this is quite a lovely piece. I loved the imagery that you used, nice work!
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beautiful
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Beautiful
This poem is very sweet and satisfying. I can feel the depth of love and adoration you feel for the subject. The use of the rose and various elements that make up the flower in direct comparison the beauty of your loved one is enchanting. What really takes this poem to the next level is how the rose is transformed and made even more alluring by a simple change of scenery. The combination of the flower with the addition of the wonderfully descriptive environmental influences really make this great. Thanks for sharing this beautiful poem.
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Thank you for adding this work! A nice picture, very vivid! Good luck!
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Wow
Wow... That is very nice... Great imagery and just beautiful... Sweet comment on your wife. Sweet poem written about her. Great poem! -
My favorite part was this: Liquid eyes as dewdrops
on pinkening petal-cheeks
lips suffused, smolder with promises
intoxicating fragrances
permeate sepal, buds, corrolla
of this exquisite Celtic bloom
It was an exquisite beautiful magnificient work of art!
HUgs Nicole (brokenangel1411)
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great flow and lots of imagery...i love it! great write!
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Love it. Great write.
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Bravo.. Its beautiful...
Great Job
God Bless
Dellza -
A very good poem in the making. wo9uyld make a good short story if it was all put together. either way i think about it, i like it so yeah, bravo my7 freind, bravo!
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good poem,
good imagery and very descriptive words that pull the reader into your mind.
excellent job, crackertl82 -
This was simply beautiful... elegant... it was all so fresh and lively.
Your adjectives truly made the poem. They gave the reader such a vibrant burt of imagery, that there was no way we could help but love it.
Also, I think that the length was perfect. It wasn't too long, or too short. Just right!
Best of luck in this contest. I hope that the judge will find this as great as I did.
- Justin Samuels -
I think your authors comment really gave this piece more credit in my eyes than i would have at first. I thought this was simple about roses, though beautifully written, i thought it more of the same. After a second glance it become more in my eyes. Great piece, take care and God bless.
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Thank you so much for awarding me the gold ( my first!) in your contest, and for the wonderful comments on my poem, I am humbled and deeply appreciative.
PJ -
What an amazing tribute to your wife..I love how you are from Ireland and are writing of Spain as well..since I am a Spanish major who loves Celtic music !!! LOL!
Anyway, as for the piece itself, I was deeply touched. "reflects the damask glory of an Irish rose
nurtured by it's balmy bounty
and has the grace to blush." Such a cool way to use a metaphor..and you kept it strong throught the poem! Great!
Your authors comment was as poetry too.."Sometimes you need to transplant a rose to a sunnier place to realise how very beautiful it is." Your wife must be very proud of you, and you must lovely her dearly...So sweet!!
Thanks for entering this masterpiece into my contest!
Princess -
Awww...this is so beautiful. Such nice images. I don't know what else to say- it's just gorgeous.
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beautiful!
Beautiful piece. Very full of imagery! I love how the words just flow together. Excellent job. -
wow, that was a beautiful piece. I see the symbolism in this, not only transplanting the rose, but the rose could symbolize your spirit. Transplanting your spirit to a sunnier, life filled place to energize and empower yourself. That is beautiful, and I applaud you.
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nice poem very diffrent form most poem i read well done keep it up :-)
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umm Full of rosy imagery this is so well written .loved the flow and fragrance maintained all through ...
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I suppose this is good, not my style or particular taste in poetry. Too-----poetry. for me
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This is an amazing write, great vocabulary and nice flow. I feel this truly is a beautiful piece, you have done a great job..
The lines I like...
Liquid eyes as dewdrops
Which opens the poem so excellently
and ..
reflects the damask glory of an Irish rose
and has the grace to blush.
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oh wow. i like thi poem a lot. i had to take some time to look up the meanings of a few words, but other than that i undenrstood it and it was a beautiful poem. nice job. keep it up & good luck in the contest.
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Loved it
Nice exotic touch , with very strong word choice. The idea of an Irish Rose blooming beautifully in foriegn lands is , well, poetic. Oops, thats what this was, wasn't it.
Your work always shows a gentle ease of flow. -
great job!! its so imaginnery when you read this its like every day life and pressure seems to flow out of you and when you stop wel... you get the picture!! awesome job!!!
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Absolutely breathtaking, beautifully done filled with wonderful imagery and flow.
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Got it in 1, Mary!
PJ -
Ahhhh- I can see the beauty of poetry forthcoming from a romantic getaway. So pretty.
M -
excellent
What a beautiful poem and yes sometimes things have to be moved to thrive and blossom.Well written and a great concept
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