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Sisters

Cordiality invited a party going strong
Come as you are don’t be to long

Fiesta of food and fun so go
She wants to but the doctor says no

Putting on her mask saying I will win
Ill hide this hurt and take it on the chin

Fooling them all looking so strong
But her sister sees and asks what’s wrong

She said her sister and her had a bond
Her seeing pasted this smile something’s wrong

Coping with her pain  her sister cried out
Bond between sisters strong without a doubt

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Written May 22nd, 2005

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  • Angelbabie
    June 6, 2006
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    I like this one alot grandpa its really good,


  • Huntress silver member
    May 16, 2006
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    Congratulations


  • fourth coming
    May 16, 2006
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    congratulations

  • Group - Roggies
    May 16, 2006
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    Congratulations


  • Huntress silver member
    May 10, 2006
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    Brothers and sisters share this kind of bond too You can't hide pain from the ones that love you


  • Dark-Princess
    June 4, 2005
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    Family is important to have around so we do not have to feel alone! I wish it was easier for everyone to share bad as well as good times. I am always here for anyone that needs a shoulder or an ear. Heartouching poem!
    Dark-Princess

  • cookylee
    May 23, 2005
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    She can't hide it from me, i can tell. She is a strong woman. Really good poem


  • FifthDove
    May 22, 2005
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    This is absolutely fabulous
    You have captured the sister bond to the tee.
    All bonds for that matter
    Nicely done Sam… me


  • Your Hine Us
    May 22, 2005
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    This is a awesome poem Sam,and I know Patty has lots of sisters that see her pain,I'm only a sister by inlaw but I do know she is in more pain then she lets on.well said and lots of love has just been sent your way for the both of you.your sister Doris.....


  • queen Moderators member
    May 22, 2005
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    This is awesome, you can't hide your pain from the ones that love you and i think you shouldn't I love you

  • White Sapphire
    May 22, 2005
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    kind of rough around the edges, but that's alright, as its wicked hard to describe any form of bond, never mind one you cant rememer not having... my sister and i are just now developing a rapport, and even though i went without that connection for 13 years, its still hard to get outsiders to understand. you did really well, with the rhyming and the focusing on how no one else at this party thing noticed anything, how the only person who really understand, really knows her is her sister. bravo.

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