Blood stains,
Dripping down,
Along his walls,
Over His crown,
Pride has fallen,
Valley crumbled,
Every step,
Is one small stumble,
Love lost,
In the midst of hate,
Too long,
Too long to wait,
Stumble, tumble,
Falling, Falling,
Getting closer,
Voices calling,
Glistening fangs,
Pale skin,
Love struck heart,
Step so thin,
Each one,
Dawning more,
To the rise,
Heart aching for a cure,
Sorrow filled eyes,
Gaze upon her,
Body torn,
Lovers they were,
Hair platted,
Blood soaked,
Voice caught,
Tears choked,
She’s alive,
Her eyes true,
Her last words,
I love you.
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Written May 22nd, 2005
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hmmm...interesting, especiall the part were her body is torn, and then once again she gazes on him, very eerie. My favorite lines are Dripping down...over his crown, nice choice of words.
I also liked every step is one small tumble, I got the feeling that even small things were trivial at the time...I don't know correct me if I'm wrong. anyway, keep writing -
very serial killer ... i liked it
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Poor thing. This is one so sad...but i love it. It has a really good flow xxx pup
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