For the very last time
She was tired of it all
Tired of holding her true feelings in
Tired of being invisible
She was tired of coming home night after night
Taking that blade
And slashing it across her wrist
Tired of lying
Tired of living this life of depression.
So she took a pen and paper
Wrote a long letter
To her mom and dad
Told them she loved them
And was truly sorry
For all the pain shed leave behind
She wrote a letter to a couple good friends
Telling them she was grateful for their friendship
But that she was unhappy.
She placed the neatly folded notes
On her unmade bed
Grabbed that oh-too-familiar blade
One last time
And did what she was used to.
The only difference was this time
Her wrist was clean,
But the cut on her neck
Cried tears of red wine...
Author notes
I chose option number one for your contest...
Written May 21st, 2005
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Sad And Beautiful
I Know What It's Like To Cut...I Do It With Every Tear I Shed...This Poem Is Very Deep, And Wonderful...I Felt A Familiar Sadness Reading It...Very Good...It'd Be Nice If You Wrote Lines Similar To "Tears Of Red Wine" In Some Of Your Other Poems...I Use Metaphors Like That One Often In My Poetry, And It Seems To Add An Atmosphere Of Some Kind, In Each One...
Wonderful Poem, Darling...
- xXxPsycho KillerxXx
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very sad, ive been there, gr8 work thnk u 4 tha read.
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A very sad tale. I am not really into dark poetry, but I do read some of them. The title of the poem intrigues me that's why I clicked on this. It is very creative and metaphorical. Great work!
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The title drew me in just as it reared itself in the end as a stealthy razor slash.
However I thought that ens was not carried throughout the entire poem.
For starters you might want to revise the grammar in thise piece with special attention to these lines;
For all the pain she[']d leave behind
She wrote a letter to a couple [of] good friends
I also thought you could have made it less prose and more metaphorical, and I only say this because you have proven your talent as such with 'tears of red wine'.
Extremely original.
You're getting an applause just for that line mind you.
Edited on Jul 21, 10:18 p.m. because ''. -
I love this poem. It is exceptional. I am just kind of wondering what was causing this girl so much heartache. In the poem it talks about the letter she writes to her parents and it seems like they love each other and of course their is the letter to her friends, which I would assume care about her. Is there a prequal to this that gives a more indepth look at this girl. If so, I would love to read it.
I have to agree with Juliana Pindar, the last line of this poem is very striking and unusually beautiful. I love the imagery Cried Red Wine.
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I loved the last line, it was striking.
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