Falling
The stone I’ve dropped
In the deep shallow river sank fast
I could see it falling into the deep nothing
Of another level of life
My eyes are following until
They do not see anymore.
Which path you took
Where did you land?
Or are you still falling through
Darkness?
Can I still catch you on your way down?
Tears are falling, mixing into the green
River, too little to see its salty
To little to recognize
Reflection of a sad face asking, why?
Did I drop you? Or did you want to leave?
I wish I could rescue you
Tell you hope is not gone
Have faith and good times will come.
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The stone I've dropped...
Written May 21st, 2005
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Wow. That is an amazing poem. Has so much symbolism to me at least. I love it! =) I cant really say much because its just an amazing poem and words cant justify it. But i hope to read more amazing work from you.
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I'll sure keep my faith for good times. I liked the image around this piece, keep it up miya. 
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good write i liked it keep up the good work
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That's really good.. I like the formatting because it really does look like it's falling. It's pretty. What a pretty poem
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Good work. I think the 'slanting thing' added to the poem myself, conveying an image of sliding further and further down. Or maybe that's just me.
I'm glad you're putting your work on here again. I never got to finish reading all your stuff before, but what I read was astounding. Please carry it on.
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wow....miya this is awesome.....though idon't get the slanting thing.....i love you...
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Thank you so much for reading it...I am glad you liked it...Thanx :-)
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This was really nice. I like the way you typed it out looks like a path. Very creative there. Love the simplness in your words. Really flows well. I hope you find the right path in what your searching for?
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