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More Than Words Can Say

This feeling I have
It's hard to describe
I search for unknown words
But they're impossible to find.

This love I hold deep inside
Is held there just for you
You can repair my damaged heart
Lend me your love, make it new.

I can see your scars
But you have them hidden well
I know what it's like to have a bleeding heart
For we've been put through hell.

I know I make mistakes
And through them let me learn
Sometimes I get so frustrated
To be in your loving arms is what I yearn.

I see the many questions you have
The depth within your eyes
The nagging feeling of, "what if?"
Searching for truth beyond the lies.

Let me tell you a little secret
I've never felt this this way
And to have you in my life
Is more than words can say.

Author notes

This is to you, Allison, my love, my life, my all.  I love you.
Written May 20th, 2005

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  • June 27, 2005
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    Oh, very nice! I like the emotion you put into it! And you managed to rhyme without sounding totally forced! I'm very impressed! I just had to come check out what kind of poetry you do when you have a contest for sticky caps. One complaint..I think:

    Let me tell you a little secret
    I've never felt this this way

    Is it supposed to be 2 of the word this? Anyway, keep it up!

    --Keita


  • xo-EmoFairy-ox
    June 23, 2005
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    Awww this was so sweet! Most of the poems I read are really dark, and it's nice to read something about love. Vey tender and emotional, with a wonderful flow and it rhymes so well, nothing sounds forced. Excellent work

    Elle x x x Thanks for your comment on my poem


  • Violet Prince
    June 22, 2005
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    Awesome!! What a poem! Flows like water aswell, and alot of emotion. I know what's it's like to be there, I am as it is. A great poem, thanks for sharing.

  • Mandaa Lu
    June 9, 2005
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    Great job. I hope the person it was written for greatly appreciates your talent. Keep writing

  • Libellulidae
    June 6, 2005
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    awwww, beautiful. allison is lucky to have a girl as wonderful as you. this is the type of love, innocent yet mature, that we should all strive for. great work. much love, robin

    oh btw-- if you're interested, we'd love to have you in our group, "Proud to be a Feminist"


  • Simply Ashley
    May 21, 2005
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    This is a wonderful poem... Great job!

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