In the chaos of day to day.
Lost in the sands of time.
More memories get forgotten.
Replaced with more sublime.
But isn't it kind of funny.
Something simple as a melody.
Can ignite that simple spark.
Kick starting your memory.
And for those few sweet minutes.
I'm back there once again.
Even though I had forgotten.
The song still remembers when.
The way you looked was perfect.
Your face in sunset's light.
Our favorite song in the background.
As together we embraced the night.
And as the song begins to fade.
I wake from a blissful dream.
Only to wait for our song
To restart my time-machine.
Author notes
This is my first poem in almost 3 months... I have been struggling with writer's block and couldn't find any inspiration .. I hope you enjoy it and I hope more inspiration follows
Take Care and God bless
~~~~ Derek ~~~
Written May 20th, 2005
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remarkable
i thought you wrote this very well, first off. i will have to say that i liked this poem a lot because i feel that a lot of people can relate. there's moments in time that are so important to us that with one simple trigger, a song, a picture, a spoken word, that it's as if we're right back at that moment and it's as clear as the day that we experienced it. great job, and hey for three months of writers block, you should be very proud.
christina
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tis is a freaking awesome write. them picture it paints in my mind is just amazing. i definatly look forward to reading more of you work..JOsh
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don't we always want to go back? Those magic moments are neve so magic as when we are waiting for them or remebering them, and we lose them as we live them. And then that song, that smell, that thought bring it back so clear.
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Well written poem that speaks for all who are in love.How true the words of a song can bring back memories of feelings that were as close as today.Thanks for the read./Write on.Jim
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excellent
How beautiful and how well written. I just love this. It takes me back also. I just had a flashback of a number of times that songs have started on my radio and given me that feeling. I can remember crying my heart out one day when a song started, when seconds before I was laughing and as happy as could be. -
thjis is a very well written piece that flows quite well. the imagary is very good and I did enjoy the read alot good job
love and light
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Wishful write
I sometimes wish that I had time machine to see how I could do better in some situations. Maybe to be able to find that person that you would want to say you love to them. This was a wishful write. So well done. -
wow...so true....i wish this too! well anyways this is really awesome and i love it. some people (like me) take being young for granted, like im 14 and when im older i prolly will wish that i did more with my life. right now im just trying to do what i can as a teenager...anyways awesome write, keep writing!
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This was really pretty! It does flow very well. And you have slayed your writers block very well. I loved this!~~~Suseann
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This piece is absolutely amazing. It flowed together so smoothly I didn't need to reread any parts to get a better understanding. Luckily there are those small everyday things that can help us remember.
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I love this poem! This is a wonderful write. It's so true though...I get carried away by memories that are sparked by something as simple as a song, a sound, a smell...Keep up the fab work!
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i like this. its not like a lot of other poems.... i love how you take something so complex and rather incomprehensible liek a time machine and place next to every day thoughts and desire....i think it s a great write and keep it up!
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I haven't written good poetry in a long time...i am really dry and i can relate to this so much...especialy as i wait for another song to restart my time machine...i love the whole idea of the act and process of writing as a time machine and the mental image in the lines as you are writing your first poem in months
The way you looked was perfect.
Your face in sunset's light.
Our favorite song in the background.
As together we embraced the night.
oh i've taken this independent of the last comment...i didn't realize everyone loved these lines..
a very simple poem expressing so much in rhyme...rare because not many people can do that in rhyming poetry..at least thats what i think... -
BEAUTIFUL!!!!
lovely piece! i really enjoyed reading it.....wonderful choice of words,smoooooth flow n a vivid imagery.....really a beautiful write
couldn't help falling in love with these lines :
The way you looked was perfect.
Your face in sunset's light.
Our favorite song in the background.
As together we embraced the night.
once again,very well done! hope to read more such wonderful works of yours....till then,happy writing
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i just wanted to keep on reading. good work! this was a great idea and great meaning.... glad you shared!!
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great!!
Great job! The poem has a great plot to it and flows well from begining to end! Keep up the good work -
this is great, but i am confused to as why the fragments are punctuated as sentences
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I really liked this and it had amazing imagery which always helps a poem. It was very flowing and just painted a good picture in my mind. Great job!
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great job man! I liked this one alot. You gave me a great picture in my mind, and also you made me feel emotion which is great.
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This flows really well and it was very creative. excellent job and the rhyme scheme fit perfectly. I thought this was a great read and I'm glad I got the chance to read it!
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Very Good write
That was so nice of you to write that for some one you care about. I wish I could write as good as you.
Keep up the good work!
Pita bread -
Time machine...very interesting title. I was taken to the sci-fi world for a minute,but i must say im not disappointed i clicked your poem. Its so true that you can be reminded of something almost instantaneously... with a spark..
Its beautiful when u remember the perfect moments.
Well done.
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Excellent
Excellent premise and the crafting of poetry. I enjoyed the reading. Great work. -
brilliant
wow, i can relate to this piece, I loved it, it was awesome!!! keep it up
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i get this it's so awsome i love the way it flows the way you tell the story keep it up and dont ever forget what you've loved so much
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So inspiring
Oh this is a time machine that I go on too. This is a splendid write and I am glad you posted it.Good for you.
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