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Redemption

Oh, how appealing is the first breath of a new spring!
Past wrongs abandoned, bitter moments gone extinct
Eyes that once saw with criticism are now blinded with love;
The tangible fragrance of compassion, I shall never forget
Tender whispers of repentance beckon my heart to follow.

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Written for a English assignment.. I would really like as much criticism as I can get on this.. Thanks This is my first poem in 6+ months, a little out of practice here..
Written May 20th, 2005

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  • Providence
    May 20, 2005
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    Elegrant and sweet.

    Elegrant and sweet. You captured the beauty of the first moment one realizes that it is springtime in just a few words. You have great talent. I'll read more.