Fly in the Window
Buzzing, buzzing angrily,
blocked by something it can't see,
irritating hell'o'me,
just how stupid it can be,
try to catch it, it will flee,
I just wish to set it free.
© Jim T. Henriksen
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I wrote this poem after I once found a fly trapped in the window. I let it out, and thought no more about it for a while. Then it came to me, and I had to write it down at once... 
Written May 20th, 2005
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Hi, Frederick! Thanks for coming by!
You wrote quite a long comment here! 
I am glad you liked it this much, both the poem and the photo I chose to add.. Excellent analysis! Thanks for the comment, and the applause! Jim
Edited on Nov 20, 1:14 p.m. because 'Forgot to say thanks for the applause...
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I rarely enjoy an additional picture to a poem, especially to well executed work that can stand on its own merit (visual distracts, for me, from the actual work )...well, this is one of those always mentioned "exceptions" to the so called rules (in this case, my personal one)...this is a poem that is exquistely delivered and the photo is right on!
I know I should focus upon the well crafted piece here concerning its structural creation and rhyme...but, this poet has offered up something that is more than format, the overall piece is organic in its presentation to the point the structure and rhyme style et.al. blend into the actual material
so much that the "Reader"/"Listener" is not aware of the monorhyme motif, but just delightfully encounters the "fly in the window" and its unfolded tale/experience...too often people get to wrapped up in something's material build wether (sp) its a person or the framework of the story that they tell...this poem/poet just offers itself up whole without any distracting particular aspects...the reciever isn't left like an admiring voyuer or just a pair of eyes in the dark watching a movie...this "poem" is alive, real and will remain so everytime it's read, just like the fly was allowed to live, sadly, perhaps, the fly had to eventually "die," yet, now, like the poetry, continues to live! -
Hi, itsjustme! I am glad you lied my monorhyme poem. It was fun writing it aswell. Thanks for the comment! Jim
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A great piece, the rhyme here was fantastic. It was a "fun" poem, which is what I needed after a long exam lol. Keep it up.
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Hi, timecube poet! Thanks for the funny comment. Jim
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Thanks, Pam! Seems my kindness to any creatures is making an impact on you. Thanks for the comment and the applause!
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Delightful
Oh I LOVED this easy common day event turned into verse.
Who can't relate to this one?
So delightful and refreshing.
Thanks for sharing it. ~Pam
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Thank you, Joyce. Yes, I wouldn't hurt a fly, nor a spider, or a bug. Wasps however, gives me chills, and I'll do anything to get rid of them, even swatting them with the newspaper. No, I'm not being evil, I just can't stand those pesky stingers!
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Excellent work!!!
Jim, You find muse everywhere. The fact that you set free the trapped fly which so many wouldn't think twice of squishing or just leaving there to expire says a lot about your character.
This was really an excellent write and the rhyme and rhythm made it flow wonderfully. Great job my friend. Joyce
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Thank you very much, Manoj. I'm glad you liked it.
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Nice poem with good rhyme.
Short and crisp.
Best wishes and good luck in the contest.
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yeah it's fine now sorry for getting you all mixed up
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I'm completely with suicidalzombie and I love the way it is written, well done and good luck in my contest!!
Maria
PS: Could you please read the rules again? If you don't understand something just IM me OK? -
Right on!
You're quite right in your analyzing Ellie, it COULD refer to someone trying and failing over and over, until they get a little help. "If at first you don't succeed, try and try again." -
Thanks Buffy, glad you liked it.
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if you think about it there's a lot more meaning behind this than just the fly trying to get out the window. as a poem it represents more. like a person who is trying to do something they try and fail, try and fail, try and fail, until someone gives them a little help and 'out the window they go'. anyways im done analyzing, the poem itself was short and sweet. i liked it alot. good job! keep writing! i liked this!
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Buzzing!
This is so cute and it really gave me a good laugh!Glad you wrote it down,we need to hear more about pesky flies and you carried this off well!
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