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Fight for Life

It was a good fight!
Friends rallied and cheered
Him on!
Victory seemed sure.
Sure there were set backs.
At times he seemed defeated
But
We had hope!
Each blow that knocked him down
We hung onto to hope!
Hope he would rise!
Hope he would heal!
Hope he would win!
We knew he would!
We believed so strongly!
Then
Then
No
He gave up.
He quit.
He ended the fight.

We were startled.
We were shocked.
We were numb with pain.
No!
This could not be!
Not this?!
Not after all the cheers?
Not after all the hopes?
Not after all the help?
But it was over.
Done.
No, he would not rise.
He would not.
He could not.
He did not.

It seemed like we failed.
We tried so hard.
We did.
But
We failed.
Or
Did we?
Does not hope remain?

O Death, where is your sting?
O Hades, where is your victory?
Thanks be to God, who gives us the victory
Through our Lord Jesus Christ!
Therefore, my beloved brethren,
We remain steadfast, immovable,
Always abounding
In the work of the Lord,
Knowing that our labor
Is not in vain
In the Lord! ~ 1 Cor 15:55,57-58

Author notes

After three weeks of trying to help a dear friend find help and healing from depression and paranoia, my friend ended his own life.
Written May 19th, 2005

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  • duana
    March 7, 2007
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    this seems a little too cheerful for the subject matter, but I undserstand...


  • Blushfulmoon silver member
    May 21, 2005
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    sad~

    I am so sorry
    I know you are so upset about your friend
    You spoke of him so nicely and was so worried
    I hate this happened...
    I have always asked myself
    Why do bad things happen to good people
    Never have had an answer to it
    You can not replace life as much as we would like too
    I am so sorry to see you suffering
    You know where I am if you need to talk
    I have up a contest....maybe it would cheer you up some
    Love n hugs
    Susan~~~


  • SeanJ
    May 19, 2005
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    Sort of a vague rip off of Donne, wouldn't you say?

    "Death, be not proud, though some have called thee
    Mighty and dreadful, for thou art not so; "

  • shamik
    May 19, 2005
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    I liked the solidarity that was expressed with your friend..i'm sorry about your friend though...the repetition of 'then' makes the poem all the more tragic...there's an implicit 'why' to it...


  • May 19, 2005
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    nice job
    king


  • artis
    May 19, 2005
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    suicide is a posteponement of reality which is taken up again on the other side, I hope he/she regrets his choice and finds a new world to exist in. i am sorry for your loss!

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