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Primordial Pals

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If it were a few million years ago
and you and I were both dinosaurs,
and if whenever we tried to say hello,
all that came out was grunts and roars,
I’d still be your all-time greatest pal,
your bosom buddy and lifelong friend.
With the prehistoric world as our playground,
the fun and adventure would never end!
We’d spend all day exploring the jungles
and splashing around in primordial ooze.
We’d defend each other from mean ol' T-Rex
and just like now, we would never lose
because we’re a team, an unbeatable pair,
and we would be in Jurassic times, too!
So whether we're humans or dinosaurs
I would never fail to recognize you!









 

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Written May 19th, 2005

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  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    June 3

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    Thank you for your great entry in our contest. Children all love humour and this is funny. Love the background.
    We would love to see you enter in the rest of the series as we would love to read more from you.
    All the best...Sue and Jeff


  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    November 2, 2005
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    Hi Ellie,

    I'm glad you and your little brother enjoyed this. It was fun to write. Thanks for all the definitions for "primordial". I didn't know a few of those meanings myself. lol

    Good luck judging!

    Mark

  • little-hug
    November 2, 2005
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    this is soo cool anfd good. My little brother loved it !!! i think the picture was his favourite part but that just cause he doesn't understand all words yet even I had no idea what this word meant "primordial" so I looked it up in the dictionary and it said this

    Being or happening first in sequence of time; original.
    Primary or fundamental: play a primordial role.
    Biology. Belonging to or characteristic of the earliest stage of development of an organism or a part: primordial cells.

    so now I know a new word and I love learning new words I had fun reading this poem to my little brother. I like how it rhymes and the message in it is really nice. It made me smile thank you a lot for entering and good luck ellie
    Edited on Nov 02, 12:42 because 'i forgot some words '.
  • Miji
    June 16, 2005
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    =P You write such fun, humorous poems. They make me smile. I even read it to my little sister, and she liked it, too. I also liked you using "bosom buddy"... nice alliteration, I always thought, and it's rare to see people use that anymore.

    -Miji
  • chimaera
    June 14, 2005
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    I'm going to have to show this one to one of my nephews, he's very creative and this is just the kind of work that I think could inspire him! You're very talented!

  • Whispering Winds
    June 9, 2005
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    Mark,
    This is so cute, I love it.
    You done a great job on this one.
    Thanks for sharing
    Tammy

  • Grieving-Willow
    June 5, 2005
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    Aw, How very sweet and creative! I love poems like these, I needed a smile today and reading this made my day. Very cute Uncle Mark What will you think of next ... my only regret about this piece is that I didn't read it sooner ---Sara

  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    May 27, 2005
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    Thanks, buddy. I appreciate that. The liberals are coming after me again for being mean to terrorists so it's nice to get a friendly message from one of my best pals. And for what it's worth, I would recognize you too, even if you were a brontosaurus or a triceratops. lol
  • smallmonk
    May 26, 2005
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    HAHAHA...this is awesome. Leave it a mind like yours to come up with some so quirky and humorous, yet heartfel and loving. You're tops, Mark!!!

  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    May 26, 2005
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    Hi Michelle,

    I got the pic from a dino site somewhere. I'm always "borrowing" images. I'm going to get thrown in jail one of these days. Of course, since poets make no money whatsoever, they'd have a hard time suing me for money I made using the images. lol

    And yes, I relive my youth at every opportunity. As the saying goes, "It's never too late to have a second childhood."

    Talk to you soon,

    Mark

  • klassy lassy
    May 26, 2005
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    I love the innocence in this poem. What we teach our children about friendship is just as important as teaching them to have faith in who they are. You set this forth with a real essence of knowing a friend and a genuine love. (And, kids love dinasaurs.) hey should relate to this with flying colors!!!
  • zenzee
    May 26, 2005
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    I don't use this word, and I don't mean it in it's conventional manner, so please don't get sick--but this is really cute!!! Not "cutesy," but it makes me feel like I am a little girl going on some imagined adventure-- I mean that I adore it!

  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    May 25, 2005
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    Hey Dragon,

    I wrote this for a children's contest about dinosaurs. No need to worry. I haven't flipped (yet). I'm still hanging on to my sanity, but just barely. lol

    Looking forward to the new writes!

    See ya,

    Mark

  • dragonstuff83
    May 22, 2005
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    wow.....a short one! I dont know what to do with myself! Is everything o.k. Mark???? Im worried about you....and talking about prehistoric reptiles?? wow! Is there something you need to tell us?? Nice poem none the less.....Keep it up and I will post some of the pieces i have in the works.....ttyl....

    Thanks...

    Dragon

  • DawnBaby gold member
    May 21, 2005
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    Great

    So cute, something I can let my grand daughter read that she will like, 8 years olds love dinosaurs! I swear you capture a childs mind. Great job, doesn't sound Hallmark to me!

  • queenie
    May 20, 2005
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    this is a thrill.i see it as a great poetic teaching tool for children for it has the moral flavor they need and an entity that appeals to them.a great lesson in the value of friends shines brightly in this endearing dinosaur tale.the flow and the form are such that it becomes a most delightful and enchanting read.i thank you for this for my granddaughter being the dinosaur lover that she is will love reading this.

  • May 20, 2005
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    this is cute
    I liked the last line a lot
    something to think about

    keep going

  • FollowtheLight
    May 20, 2005
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    Aww..Mark...I just love this write...reminds me actually of Shel Silverstein's poetry, which appealed to children and the child within us. How enduring is the friendships we are lucky enough to find and hold on to forever. This is a little bit of a departure for you, and I must say I am impressed and want to read more..!! Hm...do I see a children's book in the future?!?!?Let's talk!! suzy

  • ferg silver member
    May 20, 2005
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    clever

    Well this is certainly original Mark. This reminds me of that wonderful essence of the child's beginner's mind, where absolutely anything is possible. Refreshingly innovative and new. Loved this.

    Henri

  • heartnsoul
    May 19, 2005
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    wildly fun

    Hey there! Sounds like you are reliving your youth! This is just great! Oh and CutiePie isn't the only one who endured the dinosaur days... where did you get the pic? It's awesome! So reminicent of our younger days when we made ourselves blood brother's and sisters. The pact to defend! I love your imagination...well when we were young.. our imaginations were our toys...Love this Mark! Good luck in the contest.
    ~Michelle~

  • Cat gold member
    May 19, 2005
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    We’d defend each other from mean ol' T-Rex
    and just like now, we would never lose
    because we’re a team, an unbeatable pair,

    LOL this is hysterical. Shouldn't it be in the humor category?
    M

  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    May 19, 2005
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    SilverInk,

    I must admit, this has a Hallmark sound to it. I don't know if that's good or bad. lol Thanks!

    Mark

  • Sandringall
    May 19, 2005
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    Thanks for the entry. Dino friends!!!!!! yay.

  • SilverInk
    May 19, 2005
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    *laughs* i love this, and is it just me, or would this piece be perfect for a card??? I can see myself going to the store and picking up this in the humor section of the cards area. lol This is awesome, keep writing and i like the added touch with the picture you chose to display. Nice write.

  • darkangelcutter
    May 19, 2005
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    awwww this is good keep up the good work
  • City wolf
    May 19, 2005
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    dynomite

    Very nice subject. I think you are the first person who made such a comment on a dinosaur. I mean, where do you find the inspiration to go back in the past and imagine such interesting animals, the world's most fearless creatures like a very good friend of a human. It's a good job and I wish you good luck. Now, I'll read some of your poems.

  • PerfectImperfection
    May 19, 2005
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    I really liked this style of poetry, so very nice to read something light - sweet - and comical.... Great work and so well written! Good Luck in the contest!

  • -PyroPixiStix-
    May 19, 2005
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    Lol! That's so cute, quite funny as well. It gave me a nice little laugh. Exquisitely different from most featured items, really. Good write, very nicely done. ^-^
    ~Le Pyro Pixi Stix~

  • Demon of the Fall
    May 19, 2005
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    Hmmm... I don't know what to say about this one. Interesting... somewhat amusing... >.< that neon green background is a little hard on the eyes, at least to me, but anyways, overall it was a fairly enjoyable read. Good write.

  • CountryCousin
    May 19, 2005
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    I would read

    What a novel idea for a comic book and my husband is a comic book collector and freak. You might be able to convince Dell Comics or the other about this. It should be interesting to see.

  • cutiepie gold member
    May 19, 2005
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    Aw....this was fun..I used to have a house filled with dinosaurs when my youngest was growing up..and yes he would hold full conversations with them . Enjoyed this very much as it laid out how special friendship is

  • sanity silver member
    May 19, 2005
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    I love this, it may not teach them much about dinosaurs but it would definately teach them about friendship. What it is like to have a real friend... Your word usage gives the poem it's humour and the picture is definately a classic, but where's the tights, the cape and the superhero masks...............
    Loved it
    Hugs and Love
    LindaXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXx
  • Joshua Buchanan
    May 19, 2005
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    great

    ha ha, this is cool. I really got a kick outta reading this. It holds great sentimental value as a poem but it is also very funny to see people being compared to dinosaurs. I like how you say that whether yall are living in todays world or were dinosaurs in prehistoric times yall would still be friends. Very cute poem and I like how you use words such as "primordial ooze" and "jurassic" as this brings a true palentologistic view to the poem. Overall and "A" for this effort and I hope you win your contest. Best of luck, keep it real and take it easy ~ josh

  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    May 19, 2005
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    masterblaster,

    Yeah, I guess you could call this one "revisionist history". I was trying to make it kid-friendly as requested by Sandringall, the holder of the contest. I realize they would have devoured each others entrails, but don't tell the kids that! lol

    Mark
    Edited on May 19, 2:45 p.m. because ''.

  • masterblaster gold member
    May 19, 2005
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    Hi, cute, unusual as none were friends in that time, the art was survival of fitest and strongest, but a sweet thought,if they ever do clone them that could be very interesting. a very cute write, all the best in the comp, Di

  • ArieLLeGiSeLLe
    May 19, 2005
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    Thank you!~ Thank you for writing this! It totally lifted my spirits. I think this is one of the funniest poems I have read on this site. Excellent job!
    All my best
    Arielle Giselle
    the One and (L)Only

  • May 19, 2005
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    ha ha good job

  • quietly burning
    May 19, 2005
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    lol ha ha yeah there is no other word for this as "cute" so much levity. a nice way to smile
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