Pain that lies beneath my skin,
Hurting inside;
Between my heart and mind,
To end my own life;
My dream, my hope, my sacrifice.
End these tears, end this pain, just let me die,
To let my soul free;
My wish, my desire, my choice,
Cuts are made, God I plead take me now;
Before I attempt this again,
One last cut, one last tear, one last memory, a silent goodbye,
As my soul leaves,
God's tears began.
Author notes
Blah. I have writers block.
Written May 18th, 2005
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Wow! Josh...for someone with writer's block, this is good.
I really mean it my AP SON.
Keep up the great work.
your AP MUM,
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That was absolutly beautiful - sad, yet so very beautiful!!! You have done an amazing job at portraying the unbearable pain that can lead to suicide... This was an extremely well written and thoughtfull poem! I LOVED IT!!
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bloody inspiring
i like your auth comment hehehe, you dont have writers block
seems like you penned out what needed to be written, and thats what creates freeflow association writing. i bet what you wrote has inspired at east one person to write, and kinda like that pay it forward idea, you will have unlocked the thing that had you thinking that you couldnt write. cool, eh?
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Looking inside
I disagree with the approach of pain, yes I agree there is lot of pain in life.One can understand the compulsions of life which are most difficult and unpleasant too. The tears are the truth of life...But..But... There are so many ways to get happines. In such ways; POETRY is one of them. A poet is able recoup all the losses /pains of life. The need of the hour is to explore the internal strength as well as to use the strongness of the poetic identitity isd the only alternative for the total change of the scenario. However the grammmer of the poetry in terms of this poem is not pessimistic, the strength is just full of hope to be come a good and known poet. The same vigourness is needed as person too. It is fine job as a poet.prabhudyal khattar -
Had to come and read after your comment on my motto! Just look at all these friends ya got! I never get this much attention.Great dark write!~~~Suseann
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sad, sad, sad... cant imagine the thoughts you put down there..and i hope you just made it up....and its not real...cant think of a reason why a person would want that...maybe thats what's missing in the piece...peace!
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Wow, this poem was so deep that it simply left me speechless. You did an excellent job crafting this piece of work together.
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Great poem... very sad that one would want to become a cutter and do this to themselves. But unfortunately this happens and I wish we could reach out to all who do this horrible thing to themselves and help them.
Very well written Josh
Hugs Lori
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wow,this is SOO good and really...hmm...I dont want to say sad cuz that doesnt seem to fit it too well...terribley sad maybe...I really liked it tho,great write
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this was amazing. it was really very sad and i could feel the pain. just remember- never let your pain take you away from your life. great write!
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If you came up with that, you do not really have writer's block. You just need to watch the movie Finding Forester. Gives a little inspiration and encouragement. Hehe. Also some lessons. SO watch it damnit. Just kiddin. Great write though, I like it cause I feel the same way. Keep up the work.
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wowwwwwwwwwww I like this and I agree with other peoples comments you showed us how you feel and that is the most important thing about poetry! This is a very good write. -
This is writers block? Wow, its great. Keep it up.
Blessed be,
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Hmm...i couldn't imagine what you would write if you didn't have writes block...lol...i thought it was good I really enjoyed it!!!!!
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wow this just leaks emotion desperation it seems like such a finality great job on this keep it upi
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AWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW That's sad.....especially the part when God's tears began. That's sweet and sad. Sad and sweet. Keep up the writes.
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Wow that is a very sad and emotional piece. I really liked this line: "God I plead take me now", because I say that when I get really depressed and start cutting. Anyway this is really good, and if you write like this when you have writers block I would love to see your other work, lol.
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Cuts are made, God I plead take me now;
Before I attempt this again,
yeah, wow.. i feel this.
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awsome man that was awome and you had writers block so not fair but a great poem none the least and man really sad peom but it is a good one...erm good poem
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Fine write
Well I have to say that you did indeed write a fine article here and well I have had writer's block but did not come back with a piece as fine as this. -
nicely written
I loved this poem, it seemed very powerful and divine, a great example of blashemic salvation. -
if you can write that good when you got writers block, then i wish i had it too..
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Deep
Wow! Your poem captures the pain very well. It kept me on wanting to read further, I hope to read more of your work. Keep writing it helps get rid of the pain! -
Writer's block? I thought this was really good! You just took what you were feeling and laid it out there for everyone to see. That's what poetry is!
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