Sango,
The barvest of all,
The demon salyers.
Miroku,
The monk,
With the wind tunnel.
Falling in love,
What a strange pair.
Walking and talking,
Having so little in common,
Other than the fact,
That they both,
Slay demons.
SAngo with her pet cat
And Miroku with his,
Shape shifting friend.
Sango has her weapon
And her feline friend.
Miroku with the wind tunnel,
In his hand.
Together,
Side by side,
The slay demons,
Forever.
Author notes
i chose to write this poem because i thought it would be cool to write about 2 characters that are normaly not spoken about in poems.
Written May 18th, 2005
A contest entry
- Inuyasha,Charmed,Buffy, ect. by Wolf-dog.
366 points, ended June 1, 2005, 2 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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I like how you described each character. I think this is off of Inuyasha right? Well, great job. I love that anime.
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yes, you fixed it, thank you. First of all, I love simplicity poems that just explain so much is so little lines and words. But in this poem, it seemed you were too much stating the obvious. I didn't create this contest for someone to tell me what I already know. And please don't feel bad, I say good things and at least 1 bad thing with a suggestion on EVERYONE'S entry. I feel that this was created in 5 minutes without any real thought put into it. Next time, try a continuation. Use this poem, then write a story in poetry form using the information you explained about the 2 characters. But this overall is a good poem, with a letter grade of a....B. maybe a 86 percent range. Thank you for editing it to follow the rules.
~CA -
i fixed it, i think
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follow the rules
the second best entry I have recieved all day. I could not have asked for a better poem in this contest. Well done, very well done. Although, you must edit this to follow all the rules quickly, or your entry will be disqualified, which I do not like to do but I will.
~CA
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