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kiss

this fantastic
steel:
i
am.
stormy clouds,
the stony place,
the singer.
i am the rain,
with its slicing
sheets,
its darkening and
its pure
hard.
i am the dusk,
feeling the
melancholy,
the deep quiet.
i am the calm,
the troubled,
and
this is complicated.
dare you kiss me?

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Written May 18th, 2005

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  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    May 19, 2005
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    Nicely done, the "I ams" and then the ending, really wonderful write.


  • theprodigalsister
    May 18, 2005
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    Powerful words & a fantastic ending!! Welcome back... I've missed reading your work.