Apple trees
and
tomatoes.
Boring evening
leaking away.
Cat
and pigeons
on the roof.
Author notes
This poem is inspired by an almost ordinary view from window, one of boring evenings in summertime. It was written in the time of worst events of war in my country as a memory of peace which seemed so far then. The war is over now, but that sense of calm never got back again, so it's kind a picture of serenity I will never feel again. Or maybe one day, perhaps...
Written January 5th, 1993
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- Capture Me With Your Title by Dark Whispers.
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it seems as if sometimes we need challenges like the one you speak about in your author's notes in order to appreciate tranquility and rest ... I smiled about the "boring" evening, given the circumstances ... I truly hope that you have been able to contact this sense of peace you say you were missing ever since, from time to time ... thank you so much for your contribution,
maa
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you should have add that understanding in your poem and not your authors not, it would have a been a great poem if you add that in there
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I like this. It's like a little story. Cute piece. I like how you mention cats on the roof...so true, huh?
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Some of japanese haiku's don't have to have conclusion, just capturing the moment. It depends on poet, I think. As I said in comment it's not real haiku, just inspired by the form. I tried to capture the moment, actually sight from my window once in the past. The conclusion is left to the reader. The irony of this poem is that it was written in war time when such pictures were only memories.
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This was a bit too random for me, usually when writing in this style the ending would bring everything together but i didn't find that in this piece. Take care and God bless.
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very good
Cat and pigeons
I think this evening is about to get fun.
thanks for your comment.
John -
rings of lazy afternoons and wandering thoughts, interesting.
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Love the simplicity of this poem i agree its an interestingly odd title. But however that is wot intrigued me to read it. Keep visualising.
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brillient
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by the way brillient -
Paradoxically, so very visual and inviting. Very interesting, odd title though it has a nice ring to it. So talented that you've even captured a, boring evening. Glorious in it's eccentricity. Some of my favorite things cats, apple trees and tomatoes, that's one hell of an evenin'
Keep Feelin' Fascination,
~Tiffany~
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