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Me

you show me your life and I'll show you mine
here is what i am, I'll put it all on the line
I'm very dark and mysterious
there are few times when I'm serious
i can make every thing in to a joke
but most of that is all smoke
deep down i am kind hearted
i even let my girl win before its started
a hopeless romantic through and through
i cry even when she feels blue
she loves all of me from my piercings to my ink
she is my last ever loving link
out of my dark world of anger and hate
where at one time i thought it was to late
she mended my broken heart
that's because she loved me from the start
I've been crushed by my share of heart brakers
and been used by a fair share of takers
I've said many times before I'm beaten and broken
but I'm better now i have the best kinda token
a girl that loves me for me
i just hope this poem helps every one else see

Author notes

well you asked for soem thing about me or some one i love and ehh i gave both bc well she is a big part of my life. i hope this is what you wanted. ~~~oh and i commented on your poem hopelessly in love ~~~
Written May 17th, 2005

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  • fathom me
    July 25, 2005
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    10/10

    Just awesome! keep the spirit!
    love
    ~kunj.

  • XbrokenXforeverX
    May 25, 2005
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    this was awesome. so romantic. i love it when guys aren't afraid to admit that theyre romantic. most guys i know are all clueless, they don't like to admit when they love somebody. but good poem.


  • Blazing White Wolf
    May 21, 2005
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    this is very well expresse and the rhyme is solid along with the flow good job
    love and light
    blaze


  • Lactar Wolfgang
    May 18, 2005
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    Great write I hope i can give u some compatiton i do not know this poem rocked.

  • misty17
    May 18, 2005
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    this is so cool! it is awsome to sww a guy write poetry at any point, but this is awsome because it shows what you are feeling at the same time. Very well written, and please keep writing!

  • IHeartFatBoyz
    May 18, 2005
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    OH MY GAWD, THIS POEM IS SO CUTE! I really like it a lot! It's always nice to find that person you love hold onto her hun! I really liked your poem though, I thought the rhyming was good.

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