you and your many colors
all shades of the same old feeling
swarming around me
around these restless eyes
i can feel the room buzzing
as these circles i keep turning
lead me right to where
you led me once before
it's this crazy, unconventional notion
of an ocean-- sea of endless emotion
or maybe just
the madness of the moment
that's got me colorblind
or somewhere in between
seeing wrong from right, and now i'm lost
or torn between
the pieces of a love so purple, you.
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Written May 16th, 2005
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this is a brilliant piece of writing. you've obviously got a lot of talent. can't wait to read more.
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i love this poem. specially the last line. it seems to flow well off the tounge. keep up the good work.
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pysicadalically wonderful
i loved this poem and it reminds me of our old Irish saying that..."Love is like candy running down your back and you can't get your tongue around to lick it!" -
I liked this a lot! I love the light imagery in it, and I love teh "technicolor" thing in the title - it grabs your attention. I didn't think "purple" was so confusing - I wrote a poem about confusion and purple was the main focus of the last line. I got the story behind it and was thrilled when your comments matched my analysis. Excellent job. Great style, great flow. Keep it up!
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this is a really great poem, i like the lines
"lead me right to where
you led me once before"
i dont know why but i just do. i am glad i clicked this because i was watching an old western movie in technicolor. lol
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I didn't find this poem to be confusing at all. It was very well written and you conveyed your message perfectly.
My favorite lines "it's this crazy, unconventional notion
of an ocean-- sea of endless emotion"
I loved reading that part, tongue candy I call it. Great Job! -
i'd say you've hit the nail on the head describing what love can do to your common sense or your sense period
the choice of the color purple for confusion really works for me.
this is one of the best poems i've read in quite a while -
multicoloured :)
Love is.. when all is said and done. a kaleidoscope of emotions. Purple being the harsh reminder of confusion
Great poem 
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i love the off-the-wall style you express in this poem..."a love so purple"...that last line really got me thinkin'...it sounds to me like a love gone bad/sour...like how red (the usual color of love) has been bruised and spolied into purple...nice work! way to creative!
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LOVE IT!
The title was what got me interested, but the poem was a lovely piece! it truly surprised me, i thought that it would be about something totally different. Awsome write!!
Alyssa
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Title's amazing, but really what got to me was how much i relate to this. laughs there are times when i am that girl. But anyways, awesome job here, definitely worth reading
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So colorful
Oh wow. Go pick my socks up, will you?...because you definetely knocked them off! (Har har...lameXcore) Great job-there is such a strange kind of intensity to it-it gets the craziness aspect across just so. I love it! -
i love this line
"all shades of the same old feeling" -
yay! I like the seduction...
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i really enjoyed reading this - very sweet and easy to delve into. keep writing hun!
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WOW!
I really like the flow in this, I can't pin point where it is, but it's a fantastic read. It just seeps out from the screen. I love the idea, and I love the emotion. Also the back ground is wicked and cute! The title is fantastic, overall this poem is great, keep up the good work! -
Yea this is a really nice poem. There is alot of colour in it. And its really enjoyable to read. Nice job. Keep it up
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I do like the title. This poem captivates me with the beautiful use of imagery.
"you and your many colors
all shades of the same old feeling"
Gosh how I love those lines. This poem is awesome.
Although I'm not sure about all the lowercase "i"s. Maybe that's just your style. And there's no punctuation to be had. I had to read it twice to find out where a thought ends and another begins.
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Colors can be a metaphor for so many things and so many emotions , and I believe you did that justice . I am not quite sure what Vinnie meant by "ascetics" unless he is referring to aesthetics , which I cannot see as there aren't any. Maybe presentation would be a better word and you did good with that,
Reenie
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okay, well this poem is really confusing-- i know, i wrote it in a very short amount of time. but it's about how love is crazy, and how nothing is changing in this particular situation. no matter where she turns, everything remains the same. and sometimes she feels like everything has changed-- but really, it's all the same... she does't know what's wrong, what's right, what's new, what's old... and love being purple? that's just my word for confusion today. thanks for all the comments! <3
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It's true. This is filled with colorful images.You've poured all your thoughts into this piece.Thats apparent. But I must be a bit dense, in that I could find no message in it. Certainly no fault of yours. But most certainly a loss to me.I'm sorry to have missed the beautiful picture you've painted with your words.~~Suseann
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I'll only talk about ascetics here. First of, your tone and rhythm is very colorful, but emits nervousness as well. The spiraling cadence only adds to this circular, stomach-in-knots, although ecstatic narrative. It was really charming, made me smile.
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Really enjoy this
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i loved the last two lines best-"torn between a love that's purple,you"...good description of how love is so confusing. and really cute title.good day.
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I liked this..very sweet.
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Lovely poem
This one I think is really a lovely sentimental poem. I did not find anything wrong with this. You did fine. I have ones too that no one comments on and don't let it upset you. This one is very worthy of comment. I liked it. -
no one commented, its upsetting me. this was very vivid and colorful, exactly what i expected from the title. this was really well written, and thankfully you appeared to have edited it nicely, and i didnt find any mistakes. great job! i look forward to reading more of yours!
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