If Common Sense demands thy loss to me,
Then loneliness will seek with tear-dimmed eye
Inside my charr'ed shell and only see
A bleak despair. What common sense can lie
To thee when loneness knows I am not there?
Love, say I please thee still, despite such fault!
What could those others be or even care
To be? Does not one virtue live to halt
Your critic's gaze? Could not my love for thee
Be ballast? Take it to thy judgment. Use
Its argument to plead my cause. Then, see,
That we are We. We do not choose.
Yes, yes, for what it's worth, I want you still.
For all life's worth, and, Love, I always will.
In a list
A contest entry
- Have I lost you? (CONTEST) by jaim.
300 points, ended May 22, 2006, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Lost Love by Dancing Feather.
500 points, ended March 10, 2007, 35 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Lost Love ( pre-writes allowed) by Rakerman1.
1100 points, ended April 6, 2007, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Lovely!
Ah. Beautiful. The finishing couplet was the perfect finish!
Well well done. It's been a while since I've read a good sonnet, so thanks!
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I hope that someday I can write a sonnet like you do. Very nice indeed I don't think anything else need be said.
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Outstanding
I liked the complexity of this poem and all the depth of thought and the traditional flow and feel, the poet philosophical and yet still embracing love. A great little poem. A pleasure to read.
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this is a style I've tried so hard to capture. You did very well..it's beautiful. Good luck in the contest.
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I felt it
That was truly beautiful and very well written!
Thanks for entering and good luck!
Raker -
Awesome poem. The words flow nicely in the sonnet. Sorry it took so long to comment, we had some problems at home..neways love the poem good luck in the contest.
~Krehei~ -
I like the couplet, they are always my favorite part of a sonnet and this is so honest!
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Intense emotion in this piece and you've carried the style of very well (not many can these days) A wonderfully done piece.
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I can feel the sadness and the love in this write...you have described your feelings quite well. Several lines stand out to me, the 6th and 7th and the last two more so than the rest. Thank you for sharing your words and talent with us all. Keep writing
~Kristy -
Awwww, this is so sweet and heartfelt. You have penned such raw emotions and made it beautiful with the style of poetry that you chose to use. Almost as if it takes the sting away of the one you love being gone. Very nice. Good lcuk in your contest!
♥Christina
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